2026-08-29
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You are a canon/consistency lens for the novel at redacted. Read CLAUDE.md first and obey it; do not read notes/sealed/.
Your material: draft/book-01/scenes/23-the-good-staff.md, read after scenes 01–22 in the same directory (Day 6, night; the packing).
redacted sentence: unpublished prose Also chapters/006-the-handover.md, the groundwork this restages. Check "walking to the sea" against geography.md (the groundwork said "the Reaches" — is that a named place in canon?).
Report FINDINGS ONLY — line quoted, canon file and line, what is wrong. No "clean" verdicts. Briefly and separately: canon the scene could use and does not. Do not edit. Do not commit. Your final message is the report.
🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/23-the-good-staff.md
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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/edwin.md
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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md
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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/world/magic.md
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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/world/timeline.md
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== edwin.md trowel/staff/robes ===" grep -n -i "trowel\|robe\|staff…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== timeline day6/7 ===" grep -n -i "day 6\|day 7" notes/canon/world…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted ls draft/book-01/scenes | head -30 sed -n '1,200p' draft/book-01/scenes/12-…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== edwin.md 75-95 ===" sed -n '75,95p' notes/canon/characters/edwin.…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '1,30p' notes/canon/world/geography.md echo "---Reaches context---"…
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1. "Eleven years" mis-substituted for "a century" — factual regression from groundwork, contradicts Edwin's established teaching tenure.
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Eleven years is Sorrel's tenure at the tower (notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md: "Eleven years at the tower"), not Edwin's. Edwin has been teaching parish classes for roughly three centuries (notes/canon/characters/edwin.md: "~330 years ago... redacted sentence: unpublished prose The line as drafted wrongly collapses Edwin's centuries-long habit into Sorrel's eleven-year watch, which is a factual error, not a stylistic trim.
2. "You're not walking to the sea" — ungrounded geography, and a silent divergence from the groundwork's (also shaky) "the Reaches."
redacted sentence: unpublished prose It's forty miles."*
vs. ch. redacted sentence: unpublished prose It's forty miles."*
redacted sentence: unpublished prose 96, 178, 214) — nowhere is Fenholt or the eastward road described as coastal or sea-adjacent. The only "sea" and "coast" references in canon attach to the vale's own western/coastal parishes (soil-salts, weather that "turns," ch. 002/003/006) — a different region from the Fenholt road entirely. Swapping "the Reaches" for "the sea" doesn't fix the original geographic looseness (the Reaches was never on the Fenholt line either) — it replaces one ungrounded destination with another, with no canon basis for either.
3. Dropped word weakens the staff's canon-defined function.
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