Canon consistency check on five newly drafted scenes of the third dra…

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2026-08-30

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Canon consistency check on five newly drafted scenes of the third draft of Book 1 of Autoroad: draft/book-01/scenes/69-under-barrows-barn.md unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, 71-in-the-hill.md unpublished, 72-not-in-the-line.md unpublished, 73-thirteen-down.md unpublished. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished and draft/book-01/SCENES.md (the act-two binding list at its foot — note: redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's exit box; Edwin's biography rules). Also read scenes 44–68 in draft/book-01/scenes/ for continuity (not under review) — check every back-reference and count in 69–73 (the roster of scene 45 unpublished, redacted's arm from 67, the nine steadings, redacted's bottom from 66, the leakage counts, Tess's pacing day, the muster date, the number of days since the causeway sign in 60, Peri's level sequence 6→7). Do NOT read anything under notes/sealed/.

Report: (1) hard contradictions with Established or Working canon or with earlier third-draft scenes, each with both lines quoted and a fix; (2) deferred questions the scenes resolve casually or binding-list rules they break; (3) day/date errors (Day 31 = 15 Harvestmonth; Day 35 = 19 Harvestmonth; Day 37 = 21 Harvestmonth); (4) sums, counts, times that don't add up; (5) new facts the scenes establish that canon does not yet record. Numbered, terse, no praise.

🔧 Bash: ls draft/book-01/scenes/ | sort

✅ 73 lines, 1924 chars — 01-pellings-half-past-twelve-soft.md / 02-a-war-horse-on-a-milk-cart.md / 03-until-fulfilled.md

🔧 Bash: cd redacted cat notes/canon/README.md echo "=====SYSTEM=====" cat notes/canon/system.md…

✅ 43 lines, 2202 chars

This is a large multi-file task. Given the scope (canon docs + 25 continuity scenes + 5 target scenes), I'll delegate the deep read-and-compare work to a sonnet subagent with a very specific, self-contained brief, since I'm already acting as the dedicated agent but the output size here is too large to process efficiently inline via bash previews. Let me instead read files directly via the Read tool (not truncated bash) to do this myself properly.

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🔧 Read notes/canon/README.md

✅ 85 lines, 5000 chars

🔧 Read notes/canon/system.md

✅ 986 lines, 63247 chars

🔧 Read notes/canon/world/timeline.md

🔧 Read notes/canon/world/dungeons.md

✅ 808 lines, 49227 chars

✅ 866 lines, 56291 chars

🔧 Agent: Canon consistency check on scenes 69-73

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The consistency check for scenes 69-73 is now running in the background as a dedicated agent (opus) that will read canon/README.md, system.md, timeline.md, dungeons.md, the relevant character files, deferred-questions.md, SCENES.md's binding list, scenes 44-68 for continuity, and the five target scenes, then produce the numbered punch-list report you asked for. I'll relay the findings as soon as it completes.

⚙ background task finished — Agent "Canon consistency check on scenes 69-73" finished

Canon consistency check: scenes 69–73

(1) Hard contradictions

  1. Scene 73 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose It's cut to sit. redacted sentence: unpublished prose dungeons.md: "a stone throat... redacted sentence: unpublished prose

  2. Scene 73 unpublished — redacted misstates the entry-box rule. "It does that... Every hole. Every time." vs. redacted sentence: unpublished prose Fix: give redacted the actual clause (every hole triggers it, but only proven ones get named).

  3. Scene 73 unpublished — vent-fan location moved. Placed "at the second cut," but scene 60 unpublished/dungeons.md put it ~200 yd from the mouth (near the hard ground), not the second cut. Fix: relocate the beat.

  4. Scenes 69/70 — barn line headcount mismatch. 69: "eight people behind the lamps." 70: "nine other people on the line." Fix: align to ten and nine, or seven and nine.

  5. Scene 72 unpublished — arithmetic error in the roster read. "read the twelve lines and the one under them" after eleven names + Edwin's line = twelve total, not thirteen. redacted sentence: unpublished prose

  6. Scene 73 unpublished — "Same as the fourteenth" references a nonexistent mouth reading. The mouth-air series ends the 13th; nobody reads air at the mouth on the 14th (that's redacted's village aftermath). Fix: "the thirteenth" or "the tenth."

  7. Scene 71 unpublished — reverses Mattie's loft correction rather than confirming it. 70 has her correct "Not that loft. The other." 71: "two redacted men asleep in the wrong loft" reads as a plain contradiction rather than the joke landing. Fix: "in the other loft," or make the mix-up explicit and consequential.

  8. Scene 70 unpublished — duplicate/competing parish legend. "the version... redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished). Fix: make explicit these are the same legend growing a second head, or cut.

(2) Deferred questions / binding-list

  1. Item 1.1 above is the actual Deep-sealed-material break — SCENES.md permits "a mason's one sentence" for scene 73 unpublished, but the drafted line is three sentences and the third is an origin claim.
  2. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
  3. No other deferred question casually resolved; nobody speculates about the hole; entry box carries no hole-information; silent soil untouched.

(3) Day/date errors

  1. SCENES.md lists scene 69 unpublished as Days 33–35 (17–19 Harvestmonth); the actual draft covers Days 31–35 (15–19 Harvestmonth), matching timeline.md. The scene is right, the index entry is wrong — fix SCENES.md.
  2. Everything else checks out: water-in time, Ceddy at noon, under-barn window, redacted arrival, Fellowship's reply timing, Edwin/redacted 20th conversation, redacted's "eleven days inside," muster/entry times, Tess's pacing figures, vent timing, sedge-fan interval, Peri's "7" — all consistent.

(4) Sums/counts/times

  1. redacted's arrival (19th) is faster than the travel-time model in scene 61 unpublished/institutions.md implies for a letter sent the 10th — wants one line of cover (rider off-week, letter routed via the Sluice) or treat "day after" as day-after-reaching-her-house.
  2. Wystow's reply lands four days sooner than redacted's own "six or seven each way" estimate (scene 61 unpublished) — same issue.
  3. redacted's "Nineteen and fourteen. In ten days." collides with dungeons.md's explicit warning not to compare those two figures as the same kind of number — reword, e.g. "Nineteen in a month, and fourteen in ten days."
  4. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose Fix to fifteen lamps or "three more."
  5. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
  6. Roster arithmetic otherwise sound (13 down, 11 fighting hands, nine steadings, redacted's six all check).
  7. Omission, not error: timeline.md's established Day 31→19 mana-depletion beats (floor→fifth→third, written in the grey book) don't appear anywhere in 69–72, though they matter for the magic-missile injury in scene 73 unpublished/78.

(5) New facts to backfill

redacted's nightly book entries; dogs moved behind the line after losing three; Edwin's dry-lines method detail; redacted carrying the harvest order himself; redacted's suppressed impulse to burn redacted's barn; barn physical specs and gutter-cut mechanics; Peri's split lip; Edwin striking "urgent" from the aid letter; redacted's sleeping arrangements; redacted's mason background (keep the character beat, cut the origin-claim dialogue); lamp-servicing details including "the bottom's close" as trade idiom; Edwin's running tally of unexplained things (four this year); Peri rostered without a guild letter on redacted's authority; redacted's boot inspection; the [Holm Deep.] name said aloud per-person at the chain; redacted's underground terms for Edwin's placement.