2026-08-29
User:
You are a canon/consistency lens for the novel at redacted. Read CLAUDE.md first and obey it; do not read notes/sealed/.
Your material: draft/book-01/scenes/04-four-minutes.md, read after scenes 01–03 in the same directory (continuity: the hour, what was said, the tea things, what he knows).
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Report FINDINGS ONLY — line quoted, canon file and line, what is wrong. No "clean" verdicts. Briefly and separately: canon the scene could use and does not. Do not edit. Do not commit. Your final message is the report.
🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/01*.md draft/book-01/scenes/02*.md draft/book-01/scenes/03*.md d…
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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose
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🔧 Bash: wc -l redacted: private
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== system.md timekeeping ===" grep -n -i "clock\|hour\|punctual" not…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== magic.md compost/angry/dry-casting ===" grep -n -i "compost\|angr…
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🔧 Bash: cat redacted: private
✅ 39 lines, 2230 chars
🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/minor.md
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== timeline.md ===" sed -n '1,80p' notes/canon/world/timeline.md ech…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose echo "---chapters/002---…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '1,60p' notes/canon/world/magic.md echo "=== geography.md class gard…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n -i "class garden\|the yard\|second bed\|first bed\|barn\|beds" note…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted cat notes/reader-notes-book-1.md echo "=== rewrite ===" cat notes/reader-no…
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '95,115p' notes/canon/characters/edwin.md
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '925,975p' notes/canon/system.md
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Good match — no finding there, the scene's "he knew it the way everyone knew it" line is well-aligned with system.md's timekeeping ruling. Now compiling final report.
FINDINGS
redacted sentence: unpublished prose One bed was overwatered on schedule. One was starved. One was allowed its weeds. The fourth was kept properly."* The four beds are a fixed demonstration set for planting treatments (water/weeding), not compost-heap stations, and none of them is characterised as "about right" except the fourth (which Mrs Tansy is shown approving of in ch. redacted sentence: unpublished prose Putting an "about right" heap in "the second bed" either misassigns the demonstration bed's established condition (bed two, if beds are numbered in the order given, is the starved bed) or invents a heap-in-planting-bed arrangement the geography never supports. This should be fixed to keep the heap off the four labelled beds, or explicitly place it in the (already-approved) fourth bed, or elsewhere in the yard.
Dob's barn-wall entry is narrated without its established wording. Draft: "'First in eleven years.' He wrote it, under REMARKABLE THINGS... Dob gave it a line to itself." Canon (notes/canon/characters/minor.md, "Dob" entry, citing chs. 002/005/006): the wall's actual chalked text for this event is "Goodman Moss late (4 min). First in 11 yrs." — a single compound entry, in that phrasing. The draft has Dob speak "Four" / "First in eleven years" as dialogue and then write something unspecified, never reproducing (or contradicting) the citable wall text itself. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Mrs Tansy's "three weeks" is displaced by a day. Draft: *"Mrs. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose Stating "three weeks" as of Day 1 rather than Day 2 is a minor but real one-day slip against the pinned fact.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose The Established source (chapters/002, and echoed in magic.md's Established entry) is Edwin correcting Sepp's casting hand shape after she has cast the cantrip badly: "Widow Sepp. Loosen the wrist. redacted sentence: unpublished prose She showed him. It was better." That is a bad-hand-shape-while-casting problem with an on-page correction and result. The draft's use turns it into an ambient character fact rather than a diagnosed-and-fixed casting fault, and in this draft it is Mrs Tansy, not Widow Sepp, who ends up casting — so Sepp's own established correction beat from ch. 002 doesn't happen here at all. Not a hard contradiction, but the reused phrase now describes a different mechanism (manual habit vs. casting technique) for the same words, which risks confusing which "three days, warm rubbish" outcome is meant, and quietly retires an Established beat (Sepp's on-page correction) without flagging it.
Canon the scene could use and does not