2026-08-29
User:
You are a canon/consistency lens for the novel at redacted. Read CLAUDE.md first and obey it; never state the content of anything in notes/sealed/ (do not read that directory at all for this task).
Your material: draft/book-01/scenes/01-pellings-half-past-twelve-soft.md and draft/book-01/scenes/02-a-war-horse-on-a-milk-cart.md — the first two scenes of a from-scratch third draft, Day 1, Edwin's kitchen.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (§0 standing constraints especially), notes/reader-notes-book-1.md, notes/reader-notes-rewrite.md, notes/theme.md, unpublished notes/premise.md. Pay particular attention to: the mana model (pool growth, plateaus); literacy and how history is recorded; what people call Edwin and what is commonly known about him; the Weave's answer format and what it can and cannot say; [Seal of the Loom]/[redacted] mechanics and cooldown clocks; Peri's background, money, coach travel and why her gear is new; redacted, history, the "m" figure, mage-sight, the High Seer and the Concord ruling; sugar; the Choosing and class/skill levels; anything a character says as common knowledge that canon says is not, or vice versa; any line the reader notes already objected to in the groundwork that has been reproduced.
Report FINDINGS ONLY — each with the scene, the line quoted, the canon file and line cited, and what is wrong. Do not write "clean"; if you find nothing on a point, say nothing. Also list, separately, any canon fact these scenes could be using and are not (an opportunity, not an error), briefly. Do not edit any file. Do not commit.
Your final message is the report itself, in full.
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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose
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🔧 Read notes/canon/README.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/system.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/peri.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/world/institutions.md
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Now the remaining files: magic.md, geography.md, timeline.md, deferred-questions.md, reader-notes files, theme.md, premise.md.
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🔧 Read notes/canon/world/geography.md
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Now the remaining docs: deferred-questions.md, reader-notes files, theme.md, premise.md.
🔧 Read notes/canon/deferred-questions.md unpublished
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🔧 Read notes/reader-notes-book-1.md
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🔧 Read notes/reader-notes-rewrite.md
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Now theme.md and premise.md.
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🔧 Read notes/premise.md
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2. Scene 02 — "What he read on Peri Millbrook nearly had him scalding his hand. Fate magic. She was wearing fate magic."
redacted sentence: unpublished prose DRMacIver's comment on this precise sentence: "'Fate magic. She was wearing fate magic.' — lands stronger as just 'She was wearing fate magic.'" This is a named, catalogued bad pattern ("announcing an effect before delivering it") and the draft reproduces the flagged sentence pair verbatim.
3. Scene 02 — "it took me most of a map and eleven days."
Canon: notes/canon/characters/peri.md, "Established" and "Weave answer format" entries — the Weave-search timing is Established as "four days of answers and most of a map" (ch. 001, reaffirmed at backfill 2026-08-24). "Eleven days" contradicts this pinned figure; "most of a map" is correctly kept but the day-count is changed without a ruling.
4. Scene 02 — "it's why most mages stop growing at forty, because they've stopped having a reason to empty it."
Canon: notes/canon/system.md, "Attributes" — Established (ch. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
6. Scene 02 — "Yes, please. Three sugars." with no reaction from Edwin.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose noticed by whoever is pouring." The line survives but the required noticing beat is absent, so the detail reads as unexamined set-dressing again — the exact failure mode the ruling was written to prevent, not merely an optional embellishment.
peri.md) isn't needed yet at this point in the story (binding hasn't happened), so its absence is fine, but if scene 2 continues toward the binding, the scene should plant the seeds this line pays off later.edwin.md's ruling that Edwin's teaching greatness must be shown, not merely narrated ("he assumes a stranger's business is parish business... redacted sentence: unpublished proseworld/magic.md) isn't used in these two scenes and doesn't need to be yet.