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2026-08-29

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You are a canon/consistency lens for the novel at redacted. Read CLAUDE.md first and obey it; do not read notes/sealed/.

Your material: draft/book-01/scenes/21-the-handover.md, read after scenes 01–20 in the same directory (Day 6, evening).

Check every fact, mechanic and inference against, read IN FULL: notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md (redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose Also chapters/006-the-handover.md, the groundwork this restages.

Report FINDINGS ONLY — line quoted, canon file and line, what is wrong. No "clean" verdicts. Briefly and separately: canon the scene could use and does not. Do not edit. Do not commit. Your final message is the report.

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🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/21-the-handover.md

✅ 49 lines, 5849 chars

🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md

✅ 44 lines, 2191 chars

🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/edwin.md

✅ 45 lines, 2189 chars

🔧 Read redacted: private

✅ 1 lines, 96 chars

🔧 Read redacted: private

✅ 1 lines, 96 chars

🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/theme.md unpublished

🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/world/timeline.md

✅ 43 lines, 2187 chars

✅ 42 lines, 2239 chars

🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/world/farm-teaching.md

✅ 276 lines, 17191 chars

🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/world/magic.md

✅ 44 lines, 2245 chars

🔧 Bash: cat redacted/chapters/006-the-handover.md 2>/dev/null || find redacted/chapters -inam…

✅ 157 lines, 17203 chars

🔧 Bash: wc -l redacted/notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md redacted/notes/canon/characters/edwin…

✅ 404 lines, 23200 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,500p' redacted/notes/canon/characters/edwin.md

✅ 45 lines, 2189 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n "hundred years\|lifespan\|guarantee" redacted/notes/theme.md unpublished redacted…

✅ 14 lines, 1953 chars

✅ 1 lines, 31 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '100,135p' redacted/notes/theme.md; unpublished echo ---; sed -n '300,340p' redacted…

✅ 78 lines, 4407 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -B2 -A2 "affected plots\|You did right to cut\|going east on a soil matter\|Lord…

✅ 1 lines, 31 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "back end of the month after next\|first frost" redacted/notes/canon/world/t…

✅ 1 lines, 72 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '170,190p' redacted/notes/canon/world/timeline.md

✅ 21 lines, 1140 chars

Good — that matches scene 21's wording exactly. I have enough to write the report now.

Findings

1. Course structure error — keeping charm placed in the wrong course.
Scene 21: "The classes they settled in detail, as he had insisted. The course was on the compost cantrip, with the keeping charm and the rest still to come."

redacted sentence: unpublished prose The scene's phrasing implies the keeping charm is a later unit of the same course Sorrel is taking over ("with the keeping charm and the rest still to come"), which places it in the compost course. redacted sentence: unpublished prose The error was introduced in this draft, not inherited.

2. Minor drift from the source chapter, not obviously licensed.
Scene 21 drops the "third week of six" detail present in ch. redacted sentence: unpublished prose Not wrong on its own, but combined with finding 1, the course description has been rewritten in a way that both loses an established fact and adds an unsupported one.

What the scene gets right (no issue, noted for completeness)

redacted sentence: unpublished prose Ch. redacted sentence: unpublished prose This also silently drops the "It isn't enough for everything" beat and Sorrel's "You'll manage" from ch. redacted sentence: unpublished prose 006) as a positive canon example of her voice — that citation is now stale against the theme ruling and nothing in canon flags it as superseded.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose Convene," the two-mage/send-for-me exchange, the seed-order-in-three-weeks detail, and the "back end of the month after next" first-frost date all match sorrel.md, edwin.md, timeline.md, and magic.md verbatim or in substance.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose

Canon the scene could use but doesn't

sorrel.md's handover-portfolio bullet also lists "coast letters, salt-burn correspondence" as items covered — the scene mentions "the coast letters" but never touches salt-burn specifically (present in ch. 006 only by implication via the wider list). Minor, not an error, just an available beat left on the table.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose This scene is built entirely around her writing items onto a list and never once uses a list-ordinal construction — a missed opportunity given the rule explicitly says every Edwin/Sorrel scene should use one.