2026-08-30
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Repo: redacted. Read in full these canon files: notes/canon/characters/mattie-ordish.md, notes/canon/characters/minor.md (Sennet, redacted, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Do NOT read anything under notes/sealed/.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, 64-lamps-on-the-ground.md unpublished, 65-the-sluice-keepers-door.md unpublished, 66-the-fen-margin.md unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, 68-it-buys-you-the-night.md unpublished.
Report ONLY violations: any line of dialogue or narration in those six scenes that conflicts with a character file's Established facts, knowledge state, or its "Voice — binding" / "How they talk" section (banned constructions, wrong register, a construction belonging to another character). For each: file, exact quoted sentence, one line on what it violates and which canon rule/bullet, and a concrete replacement wording. No praise, no summary of what passed. Be strict about Peri's likeability rule, Edwin's knowledge state, and the minor characters' speech habits. Return findings as your final message text; do not write files.
🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/mattie-ordish.md
🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/minor.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/peri.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/edwin.md
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🔧 Read redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished
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🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/64-lamps-on-the-ground.md unpublished
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🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/65-the-sluice-keepers-door.md unpublished
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🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/66-the-fen-margin.md unpublished
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🔧 Read redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished
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🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/68-it-buys-you-the-night.md unpublished
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Three "and"s in one speech. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's," banned for Peri.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose Twelve miles. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
File: draft/book-01/scenes/68-it-buys-you-the-night.md unpublished
redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted had the night because of it. Then a thing came up redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
This one continuous speech-turn carries four "and"s. Violates peri.md rule 1's cap and is a direct instance of rule 7a's banned construction — "The inventory pile joined by 'and'… redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted is." This line reproduces exactly the fault that rule exists to prevent.
Replacement: "Today you couldn't. I could. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted had the night for it. A thing came up redacted. redacted sentence: unpublished prose This morning there was a ewe. You were on a block."
redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Five "and"s in a single sentence. Same violations as above (peri.md rule 1 hard cap; rule 7a, redacted's inventory pile).
redacted sentence: unpublished prose It's a corridor. redacted sentence: unpublished prose That's what's true about you in a corridor."*
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Three "and"s in one sentence — same rule 1/7a violation.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose That Sennet said so. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
No other lines checked against the loaded canon (Mattie, minor-cast entries for Sennet/redacted/redacted/Ferrin/the alehouse keeper, Edwin) produced a clear breach — Mattie's break-night lines in scene 65 unpublished duplicate her already-Established quotes verbatim rather than introducing new register drift, redacted issues no imperatives, and Edwin's dialogue stayed inside his sentence-shape and warrant rules throughout. The violations above are concentrated entirely in Peri's dialogue in scenes 67 and 68, all the same fault: the polysyndeton cap that peri.md names as her single most-measured, most-repeated failure mode.