I'll start by reading the skill and the required context files.

I read the skill in full, VOICE.md, redacted.md, minor.md, premise.md(romance ground rules),peri.md/edwin.md for the relevant rulings, and scenes 60, 77, 78. I did not open any excluded directory. No files edited.

Part 1 — sense, counts, facts, viewpoint

1. "he had walked it with her perhaps forty times in five weeks" (79) — contradicts scene 78 unpublished, the same day: "I've been in the parish four weeks and I've watched you not know a thing in ink for four weeks." Also an impossible count: forty walks home in either four or five weeks is more than one a night. Replace with "most nights for four weeks", and cut "every one of those forty" to "on every one of them".

2. "who had come to the Ordish gate five weeks before" (79) — same contradiction, same paragraph, and it is reader-facing recap Edwin has no reason to rehearse. Cut the clause entirely (see finding 12 for the rebuilt paragraph).

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"Six weeks in that. Eight before it's worth anything." … "redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted is not correcting anyone, "she was right" has nothing to be right about, and the four/six/eight joke collapses. The device needs the setter to say only six. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose If it itches, good. redacted sentence: unpublished prose "Six weeks, mind. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's eight and Edwin's paragraph both work as written. (This is also what canon requires: the eight weeks / 17 Saltmonth clause is redacted's roster ruling, redacted.md, Road rules.)
redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted had used, and said it in her voice, as if clean were a thing a bone could be praised for." (79) — "said it in her voice" has no flat restatement (he did not imitate redacted), and the "as if" clause footnotes the joke the first clause already made. Replace: "Both bones. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted had used."

7. "deep, clean-edged, the way a guard cuts when something closes a jaw on it" (79) — a sword guard is blunt; it does not cut clean-edged, and in scene 77 unpublished the jaw closed on the guard and her hand. redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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"redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose She says out of it. She was nearer. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted is the best judge, and redacted was not looking. As written it reads as redacted contradicting herself rather than weighing. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
"redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Say which: "redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose

11. Viewpoint — the closing paragraph of 79. Edwin was sent to bed two miles up at the Ordish gate with a broken arm; the paragraph reports nine o'clock at the Charter house long table, what redacted wrote in his own hand, and that "nobody in the street said anything." Either put him in the room in the first clause ("He was there at nine…") or the paragraph is knowledge he cannot have. Canon also has this beat differently: minor.md gives it to redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted striking his own name. Worth a deliberate ruling before it stands.

redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted and did the arm after." The scene does the arm first and sends him to redacted afterwards. Either reverse it or record the change.

Part 5 — the device: scene 80 unpublished re-discovers scene 60 unpublished

13. The whole middle of 80. Scene 60 unpublished already established, on the tenth, in this same party's presence: the channel is straight; "Somebody dug that. redacted sentence: unpublished prose All of it… the best water in the parish." Scene 80 unpublished re-derives every one of those as new, and gives four of them to the wrong mouths:

"Peri, beside him, said, 'That's straight.' / It was straight." — verbatim repeat of 60's beat, same speaker, same reply.
"The fen does not make lines. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
"'That was dug,' said Edwin. 'That's a cut. Somebody made it.'" — redacted's line in 60.
"'Nobody's dug anything out here,' said redacted. 'Not in the Charter's time.'" — flatly contradicts her own "Somebody dug that. It's not fen." twenty scenes earlier.
"Older than the causeway, and nobody alive saw the causeway made" — redacted's deduction in 60, in Edwin's mouth.
"It's alive all the way" as a discovery — 60 already had it alive throughout, and Edwin wrote it: alive throughout, water, mud and bank.

The dimensions contradict too: 60 gives "Four feet deep, a rod wide"; 80 gives "four feet across, eighteen inches of water in it."

SCENES.md is explicit that 60's engine is "the made cut" and 80's is "redacted walked; a finding under her name." So 80's discoveries are only these, and they are enough: (a) redacted silts into three above the withy bed and the north-east branch is the one that holds depth — i.e. which channel it is; (b) it is continuous from the Charter's own main cut to the pool; (c) the water moves from the hill toward the village; (d) it enters on the village bank two hundred yards from where Peri was standing on the fourteenth, which is what supports her half-page against redacted's dispute; (e) it is alive the whole way, which redacted now hears for herself after telling Peri on the ninth there were no frogs. Rebuild the passage so those are the findings and everything else is recall: Peri says something new at the fork (not "That's straight"), Edwin confirms the depth with the staff and says the bottom-versus-bed distinction (that line is good and is new), and redacted's line becomes an attestation rather than a denial — "I walked the bottom mile of this on the tenth and turned at a mile. I never walked the top."

Part 2 — gesture, buttons, and the record motif

14. "and it was not the silence of two people who had nothing to say. It was the other one, the one he had known once or twice in three hundred and fifty years…" (79) — negative parallelism plus "the other one" as a gesture: the sentence tells the reader it means something and then names nothing. It is also the paragraph the romance rule bears on: an unnamed intimacy, on a dark walk home, closing on "he was glad of every yard" is the one place in these two scenes where colouring could be read in. The fix is to make the content of the silence explicitly the fight. Whole-paragraph replacement:

They walked up. redacted sentence: unpublished prose She did not ask him anything. He did not either. redacted sentence: unpublished prose

That is legible, earned, unromantic and about half the length. It also removes "the walk was two miles" (already said in the same sentence) and the button.

redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished for the reader ("She had put the point of a sword into a thing that was on him. redacted sentence: unpublished prose "and that was the wrong shape" is the banned shape of it family; "all the sentences he had were about that, and none of them were for her" is a gesture. Keep the reason, cut the recap and the two gestures:

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(Note the recap of the fight then moves into the walk paragraph, finding 14, where it does the work.)

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"redacted looked at the channel for a long moment." (80) — stock phrase. Replace: "redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose

18. "That's what it is." (80, closing Edwin's finding speech) — verdict tail buttoning a speech that has already said it is going to say what the thing is. Cut the sentence.

"and it was correct, and redacted wrote it on the slate as she said it, and Edwin did not change a word." (80) — yes, this is a button, on three counts: "it was correct" is asserted, not shown (Part 5); "did not change a word" tells the reader how to feel about redacted and inverts redacted's already-stated "in his words and not mine"; and it withholds the one thing the whole scene has built to, which is what Peri actually says. Give the reader her wording and end on the last of it:

She looked at him. redacted sentence: unpublished prose "A redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose

redacted wrote it on the slate as she said it.

20. The record motif is at period-strength across three consecutive scenes. 78 ends on redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted writing; 80 ends on redacted writing. Within 79 there are four record beats in 1,142 words. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose

Dialect and register convergence

"and I'll not carry it to redacted on her word and his against. I'll carry it on yours." (80) — two faults. First person "I'll not" is retired (VOICE.md, ruled 2026-08-31). Second, this is 7a in redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Replace with attestation plus the ask, which is hers:

redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted on her word against his. redacted sentence: unpublished prose Is it true."

and then cut the duplicate "and you're the man in this parish who reads water" from her next speech, which currently says it twice.

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redacted's finding speech (80) — three problems. redacted sentence: unpublished prose And "And the watch changes" is redacted ruling on redacted's watch, which is redacted's decision, and redacted then repeats the same three words — the doubled insistence is redacted's construction and it is here split across two mouths, which is exactly the convergence to police. Replace:

"Enter it as a finding," said redacted, who had the slate. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose And under them: supported, 23 Harvestmonth, redacted walked, H. redacted, redacted, E. Moss, and the finding worded by him, because he's the one who reads water."

Then redacted's "The watch changes" stands alone and is hers.

redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted, 80) — house-word convergence: the same idiom in two mouths a day apart. redacted sentence: unpublished prose

25. "'Keep walking.'" (80) — a bare imperative with no name and no count; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose Keep walking, Millbrook."

Counted templates and repetition

26. "four lamps" three times in 79 (and "the same four lamps", "the four lamps went with him"); "four hundred yards" twice in 80 alongside four of them / four feet / four days / the four names. redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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On the specific questions asked

(a) Not legible as written and it gestures; the negative parallelism is doing all the work. Fixed at 14, which also removes any romantic reading.
(b) Yes — it explains, and it explains the same thing twice, once here and once in the walk. Fixed at 15.
(c) The four names belong; the paragraph is a coda, because of the viewpoint break (11) and the closing verdict (20). Keep the act, put Edwin in the room or cut to him hearing it, drop the summary.
(d) In his voice and correctly limited to what-it-is; too long only in its recap of the walk the reader has just taken, and buttoned. Cut "That's what it is" (18) and trim the recapitulating clauses once the walk itself carries them.
(e) Edwin's shape, and dialect-retired besides. Fixed at 21.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished is not needed. But the content is not new after scene 60 unpublished, which had redacted alive throughout; it survives only as redacted hearing for herself what she denied, which is the version to write.
(g) Button. Fixed at 19.