Facts-only consistency check on four freshly drafted scenes in [redacted]…

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2026-09-02

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Facts-only consistency check on four freshly drafted scenes in redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (Day 44 = 28 Harvestmonth), 87-nothing-to-write.md unpublished (Day 45), 88-ask-me-in-a-month.md unpublished (Day 46 = 30 Harvestmonth), 89-the-road-south-east.md unpublished (Days 47–50, departure 4 Fallowmonth). redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished / 10 ch 86 unpublished on the 24th; 11 ch 03 / 11 ch 05 stump; 7 ch 21 twice with 7 ch 54 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted, the boy, his first sheet dated 24 Harvestmonth and its question; 14 Frostmonth appointment with redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted/Tess/redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted, the redacted; the road settled Day 47: redacted's two rules, party roster, 17 Saltmonth, weekly drill day; stitches out 4 Fallowmonth per healing.md — the draft has them out on the 2nd: flag), minor.md (redacted, the boy, redacted, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose check whether Edwin actually said that in 30), scene 51 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, or plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history. Report numbered findings with quoted line, canon source, minimal fix; then 'New facts'. Do not edit any file.

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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished

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🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/87-nothing-to-write.md unpublished

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🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/88-ask-me-in-a-month.md unpublished

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🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/89-the-road-south-east.md unpublished

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/world/silent-soil.md

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md; echo ---PERI---; cat redacted/notes/ca…

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/system.md; echo ---EDWIN---; cat redacted/notes/canon/charac…

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/world/timeline.md | sed -n '1,400p'

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/characters/minor.md; echo ---MATTIE---; cat redacted/notes/c…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -A5 -B5 "stitches\|Fallowmonth" redacted/notes -r --include="healing*" 2>/dev/n…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -A5 -B5 "fourth this year\|correction\|uncharmed\|forty\b" redacted/notes/canon…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -A5 -B5 "pantry\|M\.O\.\|24th\|17th\|stations" redacted/notes/canon/characters/…

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/canon/characters/ferrin.md 2>/dev/null; echo "---exists?---"; ls redacted…

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🔧 Bash: cat redacted/notes/sealed/silent-soil.md 2>/dev/null | head -50; echo "---"; grep -n -A…

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🔧 Bash: ls redacted/draft/book-01/scenes/ | grep -E "^(028|030|051)"; sed -n '1,200p' redacted…

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🔧 Bash: ls redacted/draft/book-01/scenes/ | grep -E "^(28|30|51)-"

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "wayfaring\|ask me in a month\|level twelve\|level 12" redacted/draft/book-0…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "knot\|breastbone" redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "two column\|drill" redacted/draft/book-01/scenes/28-fifty-guesses.md

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🔧 Bash: cat -n redacted/draft/book-01/scenes/30-twelve-miles-of-flat.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -B2 -A2 "redacted\|fourteen" redacted/notes/canon/characters/minor.md | grep…

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🔧 Bash: grep -rn "^87\b\|87 —\|87-nothing\|Level 9\|redacted" redacted/draft/book-01/SCENES.m…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n "^| 2[0-9] \|^| 30 \|^| 46 \|^| 51 " redacted/draft/book-01/SCENES.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "cornmonth\|harvestmonth\|the eleventh\|twenty-fourth\|days\b" redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -B3 -A10 "redacted" redacted/notes/canon/characters/minor.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -B2 -A10 "redacted\b" redacted/notes/canon/characters/minor.md | head -60

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🔧 Bash: ls redacted/draft/book-01/scenes/ | grep -E "^63-"; grep -rn -i "go down it while you c…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "while you can\|rungs\|Ferrin" redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose…

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Consistency Check — Scenes 86–89 (facts only)

Findings

Scene 88 unpublished — Wayfaring box misdated.**

"On the road, on the twenty-fourth of Cornmonth, you got a box. Wayfaring. Level twelve."

notes/canon/world/timeline.md: "**Day 9 (23 Cornmonth): ... redacted sentence: unpublished prose The box happened on the 23rd, not the 24th.
Fix: change "twenty-fourth" to "twenty-third."

Scene 88 unpublished — Peri's recap of scene 30 doesn't match scene 30's actual dialogue.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose

I checked draft/book-01/scenes/30-twelve-miles-of-flat.md line by line. Peri's actual question there is "What else is on your sheet? What level is your class?", and Edwin's actual answer is "I don't know" (about the class level/sheet, not about what the movement means). Nobody asks "what does it mean that it's moved," and Edwin never says "ask me in a month" anywhere in scene 30. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Fix: either add the "what does it mean"/"ask me in a month" beat to scene 30, or rewrite Peri's recap in scene 88 unpublished to match what scene 30 actually contains.

Scene 88 unpublished — two independent arithmetic errors, both landing on the same wrong number (34).**

Drill duration: "It's been a month and four days" / "thirty-four days in a hand." The fifty-guess drill starts Day 8 (peri.md: "[Fate Magic] 1→2 ... via the fifty-guess drill," SCENES.md row 28 = Day 8). Day 46 (30 Harvestmonth) − Day 8 = **38 days, i.e. "a month and eight days," not "a month and four."
Knot count: "the knot's done nothing... Thirty-four days." The binding is Day 1 (edwin.md: "Fate bound by Peri... redacted sentence: unpublished prose Scene 51 unpublished (already-drafted, in-tree) establishes the counting convention on the page: at Day 16 the knot is explicitly "sixteen days" ("Nothing. Sixteen days." / "Sixteen," said Peri.) — i.e. knot-days = story Day number. At Day 46 the knot should read forty-six days, not thirty-four.
Fix: change drill figure to 38 ("a month and eight days") and knot figure to 46 ("forty-six days"); they should not be the same number.

Scene 89 unpublished — stitches removed on the wrong day.

"Peri's stitches had come out on the second, at the same table, by the same setter, eleven of them"

redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished has them out on the 2nd (2 Fallowmonth).
Fix: move to the 4th, or explicitly renegotiate the date in-scene and flag as a deliberate canon change (task instructions say never change canon silently).

Scene 89 unpublished — redacted given an unsupported injury.

"redacted was at his gate with his arm in a sling that matched Edwin's"

Nothing in canon injures redacted. minor.md's redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose The Day 30 casualty count in timeline.md names the two bad injuries specifically as "redacted's arm, redacted's back" — redacted isn't on it. The sling appears to be a new, uncited fact contradicting the established (short) injury roster.
Fix: either drop the sling, or if this is meant as new canon (a plausible later injury), it needs a source event and a backfill note — as written it reads as an error, not a new fact.

Checked clean (no issues)

Scene 86 unpublished: all chain figures (11ch03/11ch05, 7ch21 ×2, 7ch54 projected, prior 10ch84/10ch86 on the 24th), Sennet's grass (16yd8in → 21yd1ft, 32 days), stakes L/M/N, three inner whips "three weeks and a day," the four causes with the year's test (24 Fallowmonth / 24 Saltmonth / spring trench), "a yard a day, in barley" — all match silent-soil.md and BACKFILL-ACT2.md exactly. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Scene 87 unpublished: Day 45/29th date, redacted's boy (14, "no use with stock," "better hand than the schoolmaster"), his first sheet dated the 24th, three books, [Agent of Fate] — Level 9] for copying the protocol — all match peri.md and SCENES.md row 87 exactly. The Frostmonth-14th/redacted-redacted appointment is spoken here and formally posted two days later (Day 48) — no contradiction, just sequence.
Scene 88 unpublished: Sorrel's two letters (contents, "the fourth this year. I keep the count."), the eighty whips in four sets of twenty set 30 Harvestmonth, "How do you tell?" — all match sorrel.md/peri.md/silent-soil.md closely, several near-verbatim.
Scene 89 unpublished: Ferrin's road blessing, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted), redacted, the redacted, and Peri's 21-Harvestmonth "Leaving this for later" entry all check out against canon.

New facts (for consistency-backfill if these scenes are accepted)

redacted's boy's four pages under the eggs: "nothing to move" readings since the 11th, written as date+figures+name with no commentary — Edwin's explicit praise of the null reading.
redacted's full name given to the boy for his sheet: "redacted."
The fifty-guess drill's final tally as stated by Peri: head (shut out) right ~6/10, lean right ~7/10, lean better on direction, head better on distance.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Edwin's chain-ends teaching to Peri, with a near-repeat (not quite fresh) of the "in three years... redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Ferrin's road-blessing line "That's the road. Go down it while you can" — not sourced from scene 63 unpublished (checked; scene 63 unpublished has no Ferrin content at all), but is a legitimate on-voice echo of the established ch.015 quote in ferrin.md ("You'll want the ladder... redacted sentence: unpublished prose