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2026-09-02

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Facts-only consistency check on two freshly drafted scenes in redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (both Day 40 = 24 Harvestmonth). redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted makes him drill casting fast and sloppy; the magic missile at 19 on a road; his college years; 'a woman at the college told him at twenty-two he thought too much' is NEW: check for any collision with his college history), redacted.md, peri.md (her fifty-guesses drill each morning; she is eighteen), notes/canon/world/institutions.md (the failure and the reforms: the account of redacted written by Edwin; the four things and their exact content; day rate 1s 8d unmoved six years; Marsh's works 3s and dinner since Milkmonth; three went in Haymonth; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted guildmaster twenty-two years; not down a hill in nine; redacted's cough), minor.md (redacted: decision in the first clause, money in the second; redacted), notes/canon/world/timeline.md Day 40 (the reckoning, nine hours, all money; redacted signs at 16:00), draft/book-01/SCENES.md rows 81–82, and scenes 67, 70, 79, 80 for continuity (redacted's counts 'redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted because he writes left-handed: consistent; (4) whether redacted is at the reckoning per canon; (5) the reckoning's hours (eight to five = nine); (6) 'which had been in the day book the whole time and on the board none of the time': consistent with the board canon (ch. 012 board contents). STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, or plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history. Report numbered findings with quoted line, canon source, minimal fix; then 'New facts'. Do not edit any file.

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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished

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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished

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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/edwin.md

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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/redacted.md

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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/world/institutions.md

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🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/system.md

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🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,400p' draft/book-01/SCENES.md | grep -n -A3 -B3 "^| 8[0-2]"

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🔧 Bash: grep -n "Fear, speed" -A 40 notes/canon/characters/edwin.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "college\|twenty-two\|twenty two\|thought too much\|spade" notes/canon/charact…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "missile" notes/canon/system.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "fifty\|guess" notes/canon/characters/peri.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "redacted\|redacted\|redacted" notes/canon/characters/minor.md | head -80

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -B5 -A15 "redacted Wardens arrive at 16:00" notes/canon/world/timeline.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -B3 -A10 "Day 40 (24 Harvestmonth)" notes/canon/world/timeline.md

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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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🔧 Bash: grep -n "^- \*\*Day" notes/canon/world/timeline.md | sed -n '1,40p'

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🔧 Bash: sed -n '342,352p' notes/canon/world/timeline.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "fifteen on the books\|fourteen on the books\|struck\|four dead names" notes/c…

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🔧 Bash: ls draft/book-01/scenes | grep -E "^(67|70|77|79|80)-"

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🔧 Bash: sed -n '85,145p' notes/canon/world/institutions.md

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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "board\|day book" notes/canon/world/institutions.md | head -40

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "mana\|pool\|third of" notes/canon/characters/edwin.md | grep -i "third\|pool"

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -B3 -A10 "missed, and hit a" notes/canon/system.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "recharge\|depletion\|cost.*mana\|mana cost" notes/canon/system.md | head -30

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🔧 Bash: sed -n '280,320p' notes/canon/system.md

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🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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🔧 Bash: sed -n '30,75p' notes/canon/characters/edwin.md

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🔧 Bash: sed -n '405,430p' notes/canon/characters/edwin.md

🔧 Bash: sed -n '25,45p' notes/canon/world/timeline.md

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "four,\|seven,\|nineteen,\|fourteen in ten\|four, seven" draft/book-01/scenes/…

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Confirms: scene 70 unpublished explicitly says Fellowship "will be here on the twenty-fifth" — matches timeline canon (Day 41, 18:00). So scene 82 unpublished's "tonight at six" on the 24th is directly contradicted by both the timeline and by scene 70 unpublished's own established fact. Also "eight hands" letter matches scene 82 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "four, seven\|nineteen.*fourteen\|counts.*day book\|day book.*whole time" draf…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "four\|seven\|nineteen\|fourteen" draft/book-01/scenes/80-out-of-the-water.md…

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🔧 Bash: grep -rn -i "four, then seven\|nineteen, then fourteen\|fourteen in ten\|leakage count" n…

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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "sixty-eight\|nine hurt\|two hundred loose" notes/canon/world/institutions.md…

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Good — "Weedmonth 4, Haymonth 7, Cornmonth 19...Fourteen in ten days" matches canon exactly (timeline.md:231, 626-628; redacted.md:37). Confirmed consistent.

Now let me check the "one arm's enough" line against scene 77 unpublished more carefully, and check redacted timing/presence, then finalize the report.

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I have enough to write the report now.

Findings

redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, final paragraph)
redacted sentence: unpublished prose There is no path by which he is still at, or back at, the college at 22 — three years after he permanently left it. This is a straight collision with the 2026-08-30 ruling that pins the shed/departure at 19.
Minimal fix: move the anecdote's age to inside his two college years (18-19) or relocate it off-campus (e.g., "a woman on the farm told him..."), or explicitly reframe it as happening before he left, not after.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, roster paragraph)
Canon timeline (notes/canon/world/timeline.md line 357-358): "Day 41 (25 Harvestmonth): ... redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished is Day 40 (24 Harvestmonth); "tonight" during a Day-40 reckoning means the evening of the 24th, not the 25th. This also directly contradicts the draft's own earlier scene: scene 70 unpublished has redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Minimal fix: change to "who would come tomorrow at six" (or "the day after, at six").

No other checked items produced findings — all cleared:

redacted's drill (fast/sloppy casting, "the same drill Millbrook does... redacted sentence: unpublished prose
No mana-cost figures are stated in the draft, so there's nothing to check numerically against system.md; fifty small missile casts is trivially small against Edwin's world-largest pool and "depletion costs him a day" only applies to emptying to the floor, so no strain.
"One arm's enough... redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished exactly ("It left his right hand... he put up his left arm... it took the arm").
Edwin dictating to redacted because his left hand (his writing hand, per edwin.md line 177: "Edwin is left-handed") is in the redacted (scene 77 unpublished's "split ash" on the left arm) is fully consistent — no contradiction.
redacted's presence and participation throughout the reckoning is fine: she arrived in Fenholt back on Day 19 Harvestmonth (canon, "redacted Wardens arrive at 16:00... Warden redacted"), so she is already resident by Day 40, not arriving mid-reckoning.
Reckoning hours (eight to five, nine hours) and redacted signing at four o'clock (16:00) match timeline.md's Day 40 entry exactly.
Fifteen→fourteen on the books when redacted strikes his own name matches institutions.md ("redacted signed, then struck his own name") and follows correctly from Day 38's nineteen→fifteen.
redacted's leakage counts "four, then seven, then nineteen, then fourteen in ten days" match timeline.md/redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
The letter asking for eight hands, getting six, matches scene 70 unpublished verbatim ("Your letter said eight. We're six.").
"In the day book the whole time and on the board none of the time" is consistent with the board canon (institutions.md: leakage counts only went on the board as part of the reform's second rule; before the reform, counts existed but weren't posted).

New facts

These are new, plausible, and not contradicted by canon — worth a backfill pass, not a fix:

The specific content of "a woman at the college" anecdote as a device (once its age is fixed) — a second data point that people have told Edwin the same thing about himself twice, 300+ years apart.
Edwin's habit, per redacted, of writing "the answer" rather than "that I asked" in his own book — a new characterization of what he does with things he owns, referenced but not shown.
The precise instruction redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose

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