Facts-only consistency check on three freshly drafted scenes in [redacted]…

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2026-09-02

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Facts-only consistency check on three freshly drafted scenes in redacted: draft/book-01/scenes/107-the-circular.md unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (Days 77–79), 109-eight-days-out-of-fenholt.md unpublished (Days 80–81). Read them, then check every checkable fact against notes/canon/world/institutions.md (the clearing-house and redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted at the counter 30 Fal; redacted in the fellows' passage; redacted asked on the 29th by R. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's boy's second, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted: 'I will chase you'; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted can do nothing... there is nothing here to hold' does not explain cause (it is canon's own line 'the ewe blessing can do nothing'); check nothing else explains. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose rule; (3) the Pellings 'a fortnight before their date': what date? (4) 'eleven' as Fallowmonth's leakage count: confirmed? STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, or plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history. Report numbered findings with quoted line, canon source, minimal fix; then 'New facts'. Do not edit any file.

🔧 Agent: Facts-only consistency check on three scenes

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Consistency Check: Scenes 107–109

Numbered findings

  1. Scene 109 unpublished title/text: "eight days out of Fenholt" contradicts a standing canon ruling.
    redacted sentence: unpublished prose
    Fix: change to "four days out of Fenholt" throughout scene 109 unpublished, including the title.

  2. Scene 109 unpublished: "Strike four off my list of four" overstates canon.**
    Draft has Edwin killing cause four outright from the 24 Fal reading. Canon (silent-soil.md) says this single reading only weakens cause four; the year's test requires a second reading (24 Saltmonth) before it can be struck.
    Fix: reword to "weakens, doesn't kill" — defer the actual strike to later in the timeline.

**3. Scene 109 unpublished: redacted's boy's second sheet has invented, non-matching content.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Fix: replace with (or reconcile to) canon's actual quoted lines.

4. Frost-list ambiguity resolved without flagging (ties to question 1).
redacted sentence: unpublished prose
No fix required, but log as a new interpretive commitment for backfill.

5. Pellings "fortnight" arithmetic — confirmed, matches canon exactly. No fix needed.

6. "Eleven" as Fallowmonth's leakage count — confirmed, matches canon exactly. No fix needed.

  1. redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
    Flag for author ruling — needs either clarification that redacted means something other than Edwin's revealings, or a reword.

  2. "redacted... nothing here to hold" — confirmed not to leak sealed cause; it's a restatement of canon's own "the ewe blessing can do nothing" line.** No fix needed (worth a quick cross-check against healing.md for "hold" terminology, not blocking).

9. redacted's "I will chase you" redeployed to a new context (next number of redacted vs. canon's "chase for an address"). Possibly a legitimate reuse of her tic, possibly a drift. Flag for backfill, not necessarily an error.

**10. redacted sentence: unpublished prose

  1. Mattie's ten-years sentence — omitted from scene 107 unpublished's rendering of the standing arrangement. Canon has this clause; scene 107 unpublished doesn't include it. Flag as omission, not necessarily wrong.

12. A few quoted lines are close paraphrases rather than verbatim (the "sheet with nothing on it" line; the "yard a day" line). Not factually wrong. Style flag only.

13. Everything else checked and confirmed matching canon exactly — the four columns and their content; sites A–D unnamed and the naming-cost rationale; leave sought by post 30 Fal; principal's one-day answer; committee formed on the second; Sorrel's letter/frost list/ten-o'clock's-arm motif; proof 3 Salt 16:00; printer's errors "fourty"/"not reacked"; "E. Moss, of Appleford" margin note; Mattie's 24 Fal sheet figures and arithmetic (12ch21/24, 8ch06/07, 118 links≈26yd, west-line slowness); fair copy 5 Salt with page three rewritten; Edwin's five-sentence reply naming Sorrel of Appleford.

New facts (route to consistency-backfill)

  1. redacted's "seven of us, thirty years" claim about "the order" (possible conflict — needs ruling).
  2. New false-rumor variants about the arm (killed one-handed / carried on a girl's back).
  3. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
  4. Edwin "140 years of Appleford" — new specific figure.
  5. redacted's catchphrase redeployed to a new referent.
  6. New descriptive detail: printer's type quality on the proof.
  7. The specific "4-of-6, wrong twice by a night early" resolution of the ambiguous frost-list phrase.

No files were edited — this was read-only per the task.