2026-09-02
User:
You are a canon-consistency lens for a novel draft in redacted. Check two newly drafted scenes for FACTS ONLY. Report findings; do not edit any file.
Scenes: draft/book-01/scenes/60-its-alive-all-of-it.md unpublished and 61-stranger-further-more.md unpublished — both Day 26 = 10 Harvestmonth (Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth). Read scenes 44–46, 54, 55, 58, 59 in draft/book-01/scenes/ for continuity.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's rider runs alternate weeks; the Fellowship 'six or seven' days; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted.md ('How they talk'; the sealed guard: nothing about lodes, scouring or her people near a Deep; her judgements at a mouth are her trade's), notes/canon/characters/minor.md (redacted, redacted), notes/canon/characters/edwin.md (institution-fixer mode), notes/sealed/deeps.md ONLY §9 'The made works at Holm, ruled' and D11 (check that scene 60 unpublished keeps Edwin's reading of redacted biological and refuses to draw a line from the chamber to the pool; that redacted's 'water's a road' is her trade's observation and not sourced to her upbringing; that nothing about scouring/silting appears).
STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history; do not search for them.
Verify in particular: (1) redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's mouth in a bad year' — is that a claim canon permits redacted (she has been to redacted's? canon: 'I've seen it at redacted's mouth in a bad year' is new; is it consistent with redacted's being 'a well one' walked monthly, delve clean in Haymonth?) — flag; (3) redacted went into the first chamber alone for eleven minutes: consistent with canon's 'the first chamber crowded' observed on 10 Har? and with her own rule of not going down with fewer than ten (she goes only as far as the first chamber); (4) 'twenty-two days off' from 10 Har to 2 Fallowmonth: count it; (5) the counts and the 'forty a month' projection; (6) 'the day after tomorrow' for redacted's rider; (7) 'first time it's been used' for the third clause; (8) redacted's 'nine years of that woman being right about the margin' — redacted nine years a delver, at the Charter how long? (9) anything a character says they could not know; (10) 'Everything I know about what comes out of a mouth, I know from watching it take the dry going' vs the dry-line rule being about redacted (not yet seen by her? she has taken things off the margin for nine years); fine or not?
Output: numbered findings with the quoted line, the canon file/line or fact contradicted, and a concrete replacement. Then 'New facts' one line each. No praise.
🔧 Bash: for f in draft/book-01/scenes/60-its-alive-all-of-it.md unpublished draft/book-01/scene…
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🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "§9\|D11\|made works" -A5 -B2 redacted/notes/sealed/deeps.md | head -150
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Reading in chunks.
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Now the canon files.
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🔧 Bash: cd redacted: private sed -n '2047,2450p' dump.txt | grep -n -i "withy\|causeway\|main c…
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Good, matches redacted (68, guildmaster 22 years) and redacted (clerk, ~40, good pen, bad cough) exactly as drafted. I have enough. Let me finalize.
🔧 Bash: cd redacted: private sed -n '3621,4593p' dump.txt | grep -n -i "fixer\|institution" | h…
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That's sufficient — Edwin's institution-fixer mode in scene 61 unpublished (reading the room, drafting a letter with figures not adjectives, "urgent" struck) matches established characterization patterns. I have enough to write the report.
redacted sentence institutions.md establishes redacted's delve "went clean" in Haymonth and calls it "a well one" (also BACKFILL-ACT2.md), which is in tension with a "bad year" break serious enough to have "a thing" come out of the water. This is item (9)'s violation: redacted asserts something she has no established way to know. Replacement: source it secondhand ("redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted.md §2, "Warrant when challenged").
Cut length left unstated, papering over an existing canon collision — flag for backfill, not a scene error. Scene 60 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's third branch — "something over a mile" (NE to the pool) — and BACKFILL-ACT2.md's candidate figure "the better part of four miles" for the same feature ("the old cut... from the pool at the hill's foot to the main cut; redacted has walked its bottom mile only"). redacted sentence: unpublished prose This needs resolving at backfill before the length is dramatized on the page; the scene itself commits to nothing, so it is not a contradiction of the draft, only of canon-against-canon.
Geometry check — passes. Causeway crossing point, direction (NE toward the hill / SW toward the withy bed and main cut), and the pool's "four hundred yards below the mouth" all match the Established made-channel entry (dungeons.md: "runs north-east... redacted sentence: unpublished prose 400 yd short of the mouth") and geography.md ("Above the withy bed redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted to the Deep's foot"). No fix needed.
Sealed-material compliance — passes. Edwin's reading of redacted in scene 60 unpublished stays biological ("It's alive... redacted sentence: unpublished prose I can tell you... which way the water runs... redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's "Water's a road" is offered as trade generalization ("Everything I know about what comes out of a mouth, I know from watching it take the dry going"), not sourced to her grandmother's people or any upbringing — correctly complies with D11's ban on setting "a lode, a scouring, or any of redacted's upbringing" beside a Deep's drain. No word "scour"/"silt" appears. Compliant.
First-chamber solo entry — passes. redacted enters only the first chamber alone (eleven minutes) and explicitly refuses to go down the slope even with ten people present ("I'd not go down it today with ten"), consistent with her established rule of never delving post-vent with fewer than ten (dungeons.md). The first-chamber crowding she reports is a strain sign preceding the historical partial break (13th/14th), which is chronologically correct per redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Twenty-two days, 10 Harvestmonth to 2 Fallowmonth — checks out. With 30-day months (confirmed by dungeons.md's 450-day/15-month interval arithmetic), day 10 to day 30 of Harvestmonth is 20 days, plus 2 into Fallowmonth = 22. Correct.
Counts and the "forty a month" projection — checks out exactly. Weedmonth 4, Haymonth 7, Cornmonth 19, "fourteen in ten days... that's forty a month if it holds" all match dungeons.md's Established leakage series and its explicit gloss ("running at ~40 for the month"). Correct.
redacted sentence No fix needed.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Since the old chapters this citation depends on are deleted and the third draft is authorized to redraft this material, this isn't necessarily an error — but it is a fact that needs to supersede the old institutions.md figure at backfill, not silently coexist with it.
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New facts (candidates for backfill, not yet canon):