2026-09-02
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Facts-only consistency check on two freshly drafted scenes in redacted: draft/book-01/scenes/69-under-barrows-barn.md unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (Day 35 = 19 Harvestmonth, afternoon). redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted, peri, edwin, redacted, redacted, mattie-ordish, minor.md), notes/canon/world/.md (fen margin, redacted, charter house), notes/canon/system.md, draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md, draft/book-01/SCENES.md (rows 69–70 and the clue ledger), notes/sealed/ (read only; report shape only, never content; check the sealed guards: nobody explains the hole; no lode/scouring near a Deep; redacted-at-water uncommented; air direction stated), and scenes 63–68 for continuity (who is hurt, where people sleep, the Puckett brothers, redacted's shoulder, redacted's board, redacted, redacted, redacted's cart, the aid letter's 'eight hands', the Fellowship's three on the 25th, redacted's read-back and 'Write down that it worked', redacted fetched from the pony, Edwin's mana floor 13th / fifth 17th / third 19th, the clearing tallies 31/44/blank/9/6/38+11, water in at 10:20, Ceddy Puckett's hand at noon, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Also check: distances (redacted forty miles?), Charter house bed count, the alehouse, the Ordish dairy rooms, whether redacted being out on the margin is consistent, whether redacted's flash draining 'a fortnight' and a gutter from the flash to the barn are plausible in-world, and whether redacted's 'redacted, fourteen in ten' matches the day book's counts in canon. STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, or plans/book-01/arc-0.md, unpublished or their git history. Report: numbered findings each with the quoted line, the canon source, and a proposed minimal fix; then a 'New facts' list of things the scenes establish that canon does not yet record. Do not edit any file.
🔧 Agent: Consistency check on scenes 69-70
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Consistency check launched as a background agent (sonnet model, read-only). I'll report the findings here once it completes.
⚙ background task finished — Agent "Consistency check on scenes 69-70" finished
Findings
redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished) vs. scene 66 unpublished, where redacted was already stationed at the second gate on redacted night (Day 30/14th), five days earlier. Defensible if "the margin" means specifically the wet steadings vs. the dry-road gate, but reads as a checkable overclaim against recent continuity. Fix: soften to "further onto the margin than he'd ever stood" or cut the claim.
redacted's flash "would not drain for a fortnight" (scene 69 unpublished) — notes/canon/world/geography.md ties the fortnight figure specifically to active windpump draining (fen ground doesn't drain by gravity below the water table). Scene phrasing reads as passive drainage. Not a hard contradiction (same figure), but the mechanism differs. Optional fix: nod to the windpump explicitly.
redacted's "redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose No issue.
The 38/49 barn tallies — confirmed consistent; timeline.md's summary "38" is shorthand for the daylight phase, its detailed Day-35 entry breaks out 38 + 11 exactly as scene 70 unpublished states it.
Water-in at 10:20, Ceddy Puckett's hand at noon, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Aid letter's "eight hands," Fellowship's three on the 25th — confirmed.
redacted forty miles — confirmed against geography.md.
Edwin's mana floor progression (13th / fifth 17th / third 19th) — confirmed exact match.
redacted/redacted read-back and "Write down that it worked" — consistent with established characterization in minor.md.
Sealed guards — checked all four (nobody explains the hole; no lode/scouring near a Deep; redacted-at-water uncommented; air direction stated). No violations found; two guards weren't engaged since no Deep mouth appears on-page.
Edwin/Peri protective beat in scene 69 unpublished ("he had wanted her to, badly... not, when he looked at it, a reason about ground") — not a canon-fact discrepancy, but sits close enough to the poly-romance hard rail (Edwin never romantically linked to Peri) to flag for a second look at editing-pass, not consistency-check.
New facts for consistency-backfill
No file edits were made — this was read-only. Full source list: scenes 63–70, timeline.md, geography.md, institutions.md, farming-glossary.md, minor.md, mattie-ordish.md, sealed/deeps.md and sealed/COHERENCE.md (read only, reported as shape/consistency only), SCENES.md.