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2026-09-02

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You are a canon-consistency lens for a novel draft in redacted. Check two newly drafted scenes for FACTS ONLY. Report findings; do not edit any file.

Scenes: draft/book-01/scenes/64-lamps-on-the-ground.md unpublished and 65-the-sluice-keepers-door.md unpublished — both Day 29 = 13 Harvestmonth (Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth). Read scenes 06, 33, 34, 46, 59, 61, 63 in draft/book-01/scenes/ for continuity (06 in full: the model for a working narrated from a roof).

Read for facts: draft/book-01/SCENES.md (act-two table and binding list), draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md (the nine steadings; the sluice-keeper refused at seven on the 13th — redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted has drilled two men who stop, one is redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted on redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted 71; redacted; the two Hobbs; redacted; redacted's two carts; redacted, redacted, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose hold the wind in one quarter' so a light wind is held, fine).

STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history; do not search for them.

redacted sentence: unpublished prose (state whether canon fixes a population); the line: 'Six hands, and me. redacted, redacted, redacted, and the three over sixty' = six; the second four 'near end ... next to redacted'; Peri's 'Twelfth' (canon: redacted put her twelfth on redacted roster — that's redacted, later; here she is 'eighth' — fine?); the carts (redacted's two at the second gate); the dogs nine; 'the Ordish cow ... in the churchyard with the dogs'; redacted's boar spear (canon: a boar spear used on the night — by whom?); the sluice-keeper's refusal at seven via redacted; 'redacted, who's tried'; (4) whether redacted explains anything about the hole (forbidden); (5) whether Edwin's narration in 64 claims a mechanism for mist beyond real physics; (6) anything a character says they could not know (e.g. Ferrin reporting the count of ewes and the pightle — could he know from the leads? he could see the green from the tower; fine?).

Output: numbered findings with the quoted line, the canon file/line or fact contradicted, and a concrete replacement. Then 'New facts' one line each. No praise.

22 tool calls

🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/64-lamps-on-the-ground.md unpublished

✅ 29 lines, 6685 chars

🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/65-the-sluice-keepers-door.md unpublished

✅ 41 lines, 7001 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== BACKFILL-ACT2.md ===" cat draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md echo "==…

✅ 30 lines, 2146 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== system.md ===" cat notes/canon/system.md echo "=== timeline.md ==…

✅ 41 lines, 2219 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== ferrin.md ===" cat notes/canon/characters/ferrin.md echo "=== redacted…

✅ 48 lines, 2243 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== BACKFILL full ===" grep -n -i -A3 -B3 "sluice\|steading\|mist\|ha…

✅ 21 lines, 2580 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== magic.md still-air ===" grep -n -i -A6 -B2 "still.air\|four hours…

✅ 85 lines, 5350 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== timeline day 29 ===" grep -n -i -A3 -B3 "day 29\|13 harvestmonth\…

✅ 58 lines, 3435 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== redacted.md watch ===" grep -n -i -A6 -B2 "lamps on the ground\…

✅ 234 lines, 14285 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -rn -i "boar spear" notes/ draft/book-01/*.md draft/book-01/scenes/*.m…

✅ 13 lines, 1431 chars

🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '1,200p' draft/book-01/scenes/06-*.md 2>/dev/null | head -100

✅ 19 lines, 3055 chars

Findings

  1. Clock order error in scene 64 unpublished — the "twenty to eight" paragraph is placed before "he had it" at half past seven, but 19:40 is after 19:30.
    Quoted: "He did not stop... redacted sentence: unpublished prose and the mist did not come... redacted sentence: unpublished prose
    redacted sentence: unpublished prose The scene narrates continued active effort ("he did not stop") at 19:40, a time after canon says the working was already finished and set. Either the paragraph order is reversed or the "did not stop" framing wrongly implies ongoing strain past completion.
    redacted sentence: unpublished prose "He watched the light go, at twenty to eight...") rather than "he did not stop," since by then the working was already set and holding itself.

2. "Three over sixty" reassigned from lantern lane to the withy-bed watch line.
Quoted (65): "redacted, redacted, redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted sentence: unpublished prose 015–018) — a village-lane lamplighting duty, not the front-line fen-margin post. Putting the same three elderly men in the exposed watch line at the withy bed, doing warren work, contradicts their established (safer) posting.
Replacement: either drop "the three over sixty" from the withy-bed six and give redacted three different/unnamed hands for that post, or explicitly reconcile — have redacted state the lantern-lane men are being repurposed tonight, which would need to be a flagged new fact, not silently asserted.

  1. redacted's two carts placed at the second gate on Day 29 (13th), not redacted night.
    Quoted (65): "redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose because if the line comes back it comes back on a cart and not on its feet."
    Canon: notes/canon/characters/minor.md ties redacted's two carts to "redacted night" — i.e. Day 30 (14 Harvestmonth) per world/timeline.md's "Day 30: redacted night proper." Scene 65 unpublished is Day 29 (the watch/evacuation night, sluice-keeper's refusal), a day earlier.
    Replacement: either move this detail to a Day-30 scene, or confirm/flag as a deliberate correction to minor.md (carts present both nights) — as written it silently contradicts the existing dating.

New facts

redacted sentence: unpublished prose