2026-09-02
User:
You are a canon-consistency lens for a novel draft in redacted. Check four newly drafted scenes for FACTS ONLY (counts, dates, arithmetic, names, who knows what, farming facts, mechanics, geography, timeline, who was in the room). Report findings; do not edit any file.
Scenes: draft/book-01/scenes/47-dont-tell-me-yet.md unpublished, 48-the-eleventh-of-cornmonth.md unpublished, 49-the-middles-walk.md unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished — all Day 16 = 30 Cornmonth (Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth). Read scenes 31–46 in draft/book-01/scenes/ for continuity (34, 36, 40, 42, 43, 45, 46 in full at least).
Read for facts: draft/book-01/SCENES.md (act-two table and binding list — note the binding list's silent-soil bullets: 'the crop is late, not dead; nobody says the ground is dead'), draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md (esp. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Farming checks specifically: (1) scene 47 unpublished's account of how barley ripens and how a farmer reads its stage (straw yellowing at the knee first; heads filling; colour) — is it real? (2) scene 48 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose (3) scene 49 unpublished's three-points-fix-a-circle-centre geometry and the arithmetic (inner ring stopped mid-Weedmonth; outer 11 Cornmonth; 10–11 weeks between; 40–50 yd; 'four yards a week and more'); (4) scene 50 unpublished's claim that standing barley left uncut goes down in Fallowmonth wet; 'forty pound' for eleven acres at the parish price undocked — consistent with the institutions.md derived yield (3.6–4 quarters/acre) and whatever barley price is implied? redacted sentence: unpublished prose what price per quarter £40/11 acres implies, and say whether it is plausible for the period.) (5) the sold sheep detail ('two sheep off it in Milkmonth', 'not slept right since') against mattie-ordish.md; (6) the redacted beat at the top of 47 against her canon dates; (7) whether any line says or implies the ground is dead or the crop cannot ripen (forbidden), as opposed to Edwin's own written prediction (allowed: he may be wrong); (8) Mattie's band readings vs Edwin's theory — any internal contradiction between 47's stages (outer three weeks behind; second band five–six weeks; third seven–eight weeks; inner Weedmonth) and 49's dates (inner mid-Weedmonth; outer 11 Cornmonth; 'ten or eleven weeks between')? Check the arithmetic: Day 16 = 30 Cornmonth; hay cut 20 Weedmonth per BACKFILL.
STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history; do not search for them. Canon files may quote old chapter lines — those are facts, not lines to suggest.
Output: numbered findings, each with the quoted line, the canon file/line or the real-world fact that contradicts it, and a concrete replacement. Then 'New facts' (one line each). No praise, no list of what passed.
🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose
🔧 Read notes/canon/world/silent-soil.md
🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/mattie-ordish.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/redacted.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/world/institutions.md
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🔧 Read notes/canon/world/timeline.md
🔧 Read notes/canon/characters/minor.md
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🔧 Bash: cat "redacted/draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md" 2>/dev/null | head -300 echo "---SCENES--…
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redacted's schedule conflicts with her own established mouth-visit dates.
Scene 47 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
notes/canon/world/timeline.md (Day 18 / 2 Harvestmonth entry): "redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose 014)." Established fact is that redacted herself is at the mouth on 2 Harvestmonth, not at some unestablished "the chain" (a location/activity never elsewhere attributed to her — chain-reading is Mattie's instrument, per mattie-ordish.md). Replacement: have redacted say she'll be at the mouth on the 2nd (matching canon), or cut the "chain" clause; do not introduce a new unestablished redacted activity called "the chain."
Scene 49 unpublished's stated gap between the inner ring's and outer band's stop-dates is arithmetically wrong.
Scene 49 unpublished: *"The inner ring stopped in Weedmonth. The outer stopped on the eleventh. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted sentence: unpublished prose By the system.md/timeline.md calendar (30-day months, Weedmonth = month 6, Cornmonth = month 8), mid-Weedmonth ≈ doy 165 and 11 Cornmonth = doy 221 — a gap of 56 days = exactly 8 weeks, not ten or eleven. This is a load-bearing "sum done three times" moment (per draft/book-01/SCENES.md line 153, "a sum done three times in the dirt"), so the arithmetic needs to be right. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Scene 47 unpublished's third-band reading is a week or so off the same chain, though within a farmer's-eye rounding tolerance.
Scene 47 unpublished: "The third [band]. 'That's the start of Haymonth. Heads just filling. Seven, eight weeks.'" Start of Haymonth is doy 181; Day 16 = 30 Cornmonth = doy 226; the gap is 45 days ≈ 6.4 weeks, not seven or eight. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
4. Mattie's sold-sheep detail slightly overstates the established fact.
Scene 50 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted sentence: unpublished prose Minor, but "not slept right since" reads as a stronger, different claim than the source fact. redacted sentence: unpublished prose
5. £40 for the eleven acres implies a barley price well above anything the ledger has shown, though not clearly impossible.
Scene 50 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose / "Better than forty pound, undocked."* This matches the deliberate correction in draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md ("The far bay's stock is worth forty pound and better, not nine") and is not an error against that file. But checked against notes/canon/world/institutions.md's derived yield (3.6–4 quarters/acre, from redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Not necessarily wrong for the period, but it silently commits canon to a price point institutions.md had deliberately left open. Flag for a canon decision, not necessarily a rewrite.
6. No forbidden "ground is dead" language found — Edwin's Weedmonth/Fallowmonth non-ripening claim in scene 50 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose No violation.
7. Everything else checked out: the 31-acres/11-inside figure (scene 50 unpublished) matches mattie-ordish.md exactly; the 11 Cornmonth factor's-man date and "plus or minus seven days" (scene 48 unpublished) match silent-soil.md and BACKFILL-ACT2.md exactly; the 15 Cornmonth/19 Cornmonth cross-references in scene 48 unpublished (Peri's arrival, the letter's arrival) check out against timeline.md Day 1 and Day 5; the three-points-fix-a-circle geometry in scene 49 unpublished is sound; barley ripening-from-the-base description is agronomically sound.