2026-09-02
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Facts-only consistency check on two freshly drafted scenes in redacted: draft/book-01/scenes/71-in-the-hill.md unpublished (Day 35 = 19 Harvestmonth, 22:20) and draft/book-01/scenes/72-not-in-the-line.md unpublished (Day 36 = 20 Harvestmonth). Read them, then check every checkable fact against notes/canon/world/timeline.md (Days 35–37), notes/canon/characters/.md (redacted, peri, edwin, redacted, redacted, minor.md for redacted/redacted), notes/canon/system.md (the [redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Specific checks: (1) redacted party count — canon says thirteen go down on the 21st: does '五 Fenholt + six redacted + Edwin + Peri = 13' hold, and is redacted at the mouth consistent with canon (or does canon have redacted going down)? Is redacted excluded? Who are Fenholt's five? (2) Edwin's stated reasoning about 'two wardens don't both go down' and 'twelve' — is either in canon, or new? Flag as new facts if so. (3) redacted 312 and 'half of what he had been a week ago' versus the mana-floor figures (a third on the 19th). redacted sentence: unpublished prose (5) The Fellowship letter timing (same evening as redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose (6) redacted's page rule about lamps going yellow and coming up — check against notes/sealed/ (read only; report shape only, never content) that it does not explain anything and is consistent with the sealed guards; and check that 'the fourth time' lamps-went-yellow claim does not contradict redacted's canon history of four delves. (7) redacted's 'eleven days earlier than posted' arithmetic (posted 2 Fallowmonth; delve 21 Harvestmonth; 30-day months). (8) Peri's 'thirty-five days in the parish' (arrived Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth). (9) 'redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose (10) redacted's first warden and the strap-sewing habit vs redacted.md. STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, or plans/book-01/arc-0.md, unpublished or their git history. Report numbered findings with quoted line, canon source, and a minimal fix; then a 'New facts' list. Do not edit any file.
🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,400p' draft/book-01/scenes/71-in-the-hill.md unpublished
🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,400p' draft/book-01/scenes/72-not-in-the-line.md unpublished
✅ 41 lines, 6143 chars
✅ 37 lines, 5762 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -A5 -B5 "Day 3[5-7]\|Harvestmonth" notes/canon/world/timeline.md | sed -n '1,300p'
✅ 300 lines, 18309 chars
🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,200p' notes/canon/characters/redacted.md
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🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,200p' notes/canon/characters/peri.md; echo ---EDWIN---; sed -n '1,200p' notes/c…
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🔧 Bash: sed -n '1,200p' notes/canon/characters/redacted.md 2>/dev/null; echo ---redacted---;…
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🔧 Bash: grep -n -A30 "redacted\|answer format\|middle column" notes/canon/system.md | sed -n '1…
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🔧 Bash: grep -n -A15 "^71\|^72\|^73\|71 —\|72 —\|73 —\|scene 71 unpublished\|scene 72 unpublished…
✅ 1 lines, 31 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -B2 -A15 "mana.*floor\|floor.*mana\|a third\|a fifth" notes/canon/world/timeline.…
✅ 39 lines, 2605 chars
🔧 Bash: ls draft/book-01/scenes/ | sed -n '1,90p'; echo ---BACKFILL---; sed -n '1,250p' draft/boo…
✅ 117 lines, 7316 chars
🔧 Bash: ls notes/sealed/ 2>/dev/null
✅ 15 lines, 317 chars — COHERENCE.md / deeps.md / destiny.md
🔧 Read notes/sealed/deeps.md
✅ 880 lines, 59312 chars
🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished 2>/dev/null; echo ---69---; sed -n '1…
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🔧 Bash: grep -n "three hundred" draft/book-01/scenes/71-in-the-hill.md unpublished draft/book-0…
✅ 3 lines, 2599 chars
🔧 Bash: cat -A draft/book-01/scenes/72-not-in-the-line.md unpublished | head -1 >/dev/null; wc…
✅ 42 lines, 6301 chars
🔧 Bash: md5sum draft/book-01/scenes/71-in-the-hill.md unpublished; echo ---; cat -n draft/book-…
✅ 43 lines, 6517 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n "two wardens\|don't both go down\|eleven" draft/book-01/scenes/71-in-the-hill.md…
✅ 2 lines, 1203 chars
🔧 Bash: find draft/book-01 -iname "SCENES.md";
✅ 1 lines, 23 chars — draft/book-01/SCENES.md
🔧 Bash: grep -n -B1 -A6 "^| 71\|^| 72\|^| 73\|71\.\|72\.\|73\." draft/book-01/SCENES.md | sed -n…
✅ 51 lines, 3850 chars
Provenance note: an early tool call in this session returned corrupted text for both scenes (extra sentences, a different roster, "eleven" arithmetic, a "two wardens don't both go down" line that doesn't exist in the file). I caught this by re-cat-ing both files with md5 hashes and rebuilt the analysis from that verified text. Everything below is checked against the actual file content (scene 71 unpublished md5 688724ad..., scene 72 unpublished md5 03f91134...).
edwin.md states his arm was "splinted by redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted is correctly excluded (his arm was hurt on redacted night, "not use it before Frostmonth," minor.md). redacted staying at the mouth is uncontradicted.2. Fenholt headcount arithmetic doesn't match the roster — flag.
Scene 71 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's arm out of it, and herself; six of redacted's, and redacted, who goes last with the rope. That's twelve." That's Fenholt = 4 hands + redacted = 5, redacted = 6 hands + redacted = 7, total 12. But the actual roster the next morning (scene 72 unpublished, ln 15) lists "Fenholt Charter, four, redacted first" — i.e. Fenholt totals 4 including redacted, not 5. Edwin's private count and the signed muster disagree by one Fenholt hand, and his claim that Peri is "the twelfth" (ln 13) doesn't reconcile either way (5+7=12 already, without her). Minimal fix: change scene 71 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose and herself" (Fenholt = 4), which also fixes the twelfth-slot arithmetic for Peri.
3. Edwin's "two wardens don't both go down" reasoning — not present in the text.
This phrase and the "so it's eleven" line asked about in the brief do not appear anywhere in the actual scenes (confirmed by grep against the verified files). Nothing to check; flagging so the parent agent doesn't chase a claim from the corrupted read.
5. "Half of what he had been a week ago" vs the mana-floor trend — flag, moderate.
timeline.md/scene 69 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose A week before Day 36 (20th) is Day 29 (13th) = floor, his lowest point. Scene 72 unpublished's "half of what he had been a week ago" (ln 15), read as the tracked mana figure, implies he's now below where a straightforward continuation of the recovery arc would put him, or at best a fraction of an already-minimal floor value — it doesn't sit well against "a third" reached just the day before. If this is meant as general vigor/condition rather than the grey-book mana metric, it should be worded to avoid reading as the same measurement; as written it risks contradicting the established recovery curve. Minimal fix: rephrase to avoid inviting a mana-arithmetic reading (e.g., tie it explicitly to visible tiredness/injury-cost rather than "what he had been").
6. The Weave answer — complies.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished ln 33) is a short, present-tense, second-person fragment, true and under-specified, filed "in the middle column" (ln 35) — matches system.md's format ruling exactly. It does not describe any Deep mechanism (air, drain, water level) — it's about redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
7. Fellowship letter timing — holds.
Scene 71 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted's lamps-go-yellow page rule — complies with the sealed guard, no issue.
Scene 72 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose he wrote everything [else]"), matching notes/sealed/deeps.md clue #5 ("Lamps burning badly... Must not be explained"). "The fourth time" (her fourth of four prior delves per redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted") is internally consistent, not a fifth/extra delve. No content from the sealed answer leaks onto the page.
redacted's "eleven days early" arithmetic — holds.
Muster posted for 2 Fallowmonth; signed for 21 Harvestmonth. 30-day months: 21→30 Harvestmonth = 9 days, +2 into Fallowmonth = 11. Matches scene 72 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
10. Peri's "thirty-five days in the parish" — flag, moderate.
Scene 71 unpublished ln 13 ("been in the parish five weeks") and scene 72 unpublished ln 15 ("thirty-five days") agree with each other, and 35 = Day 36 − Day 1 (arrival Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth) checks out as raw arithmetic. But the established in-story convention for "time in the parish/village" uses arrival at Fenholt (Day 9) as the baseline: timeline.md Day 26 gives "Seventeen days in the village" = Day 26 − Day 9 = 17, confirmed. Under that convention, Day 36 − Day 9 = 27 days, not 35. If "the parish" means Fenholt (which context strongly implies — redacted and redacted are discussing who's fit to go into a local Charter's hill), 35/five weeks looks like an 8-day overcount. Minimal fix: change to "twenty-seven days" / "under four weeks" in both scenes, or if "the parish" is deliberately meant to count from Day 1 (the whole journey), make that scope explicit so it doesn't read against the Day-9 convention already on the page.
"redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
Scene 71 unpublished ln 39 and scene 72 unpublished ln 3 both put Edwin's approach to redacted at seven in the street, matching timeline.md Day 36: "Edwin asks redacted at 07:00 in the street."
redacted's first warden and strap-sewing — contradiction, moderate-high severity.
Scene 72 unpublished ln 29: "'My first warden did his own,' she said... 'I asked him why... redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted.md (Established, chs. redacted sentence: unpublished prose Minimal fix: change "his own... him... he said... he wrote everything... he was one of the ones" to "her own... her... she said... she wrote everything... she was one of the ones" throughout ln 29.
consistency-backfill, not yet binding)Two hard contradictions to flag to the author: (4) the "three hundred and twelve" age against the well-established "three hundred and fifty," and (12) the male pronouns for redacted's first warden against her established "her first warden was a woman." One arithmetic mismatch worth fixing before acceptance: (2) Fenholt's headcount (5 vs the roster's 4). Two moderate items worth a second look: (5) the mana-recovery phrasing and (10) the "thirty-five days" figure. Everything else checked — party structure/redacted's role, the Weave answer's format and non-interference with the Deep's sealed evidence, the Fellowship letter dates, redacted's day arithmetic, the 07:00 muster, and the lamps-yellow rule against the sealed guard — holds up clean.