2026-09-02
User:
Facts-only consistency check on two freshly drafted scenes in redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (Day 51 night = 5 Fallowmonth, redacted's east house) and 93-up-out-of-the-fen.md unpublished (Day 52 = 6 Fallowmonth, redacted). redacted sentence check the distance from the house to the fourth mile; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Also check: (1) what the Pellings' rider was in canon (sorrel.md: 'the rider verdict' — what did Sorrel refuse to send?) and whether the draft's version (a rider sent east about the frost list) matches; (2) 'Miss Millbrook' as a form of address: any canon on how Peri is addressed; (3) the gatekeeper's speech about packs and sticks: new; (4) Peri counting chimneys to nineteen: new; (5) 'redacted' still with them at redacted: canon has redacted's cart only as far as the fen edge (scene 89 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, or plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history. Report numbered findings with quoted line, canon source, minimal fix; then 'New facts'. Do not edit any file.
🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished
🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/93-up-out-of-the-fen.md unpublished
✅ 33 lines, 5196 chars
✅ 29 lines, 5089 chars
🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md
✅ 44 lines, 2191 chars
🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/edwin.md
🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/world/geography.md
✅ 43 lines, 2244 chars
✅ 402 lines, 24182 chars
🔧 Bash: cat notes/canon/characters/minor.md
✅ 38 lines, 2187 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -A5 -B5 "Day 51\|Day 52" notes/canon/world/timeline.md
🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/85*.md
✅ 31 lines, 4848 chars
✅ 33 lines, 2294 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "left-hand\|left hand\|three words\|nudge\|Sorrel\|Marsh" notes/canon/characte…
✅ 36 lines, 2641 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "writing\|nudge\|skill.*assist\|assist.*skill" notes/canon/system.md | head -50
✅ 18 lines, 1277 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "millbrook\|miss millbrook\|form of address\|redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose…
✅ 18 lines, 3558 chars
🔧 Bash: sed -n '170,200p;320,370p' notes/canon/characters/edwin.md
✅ 82 lines, 5346 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -B3 -A15 "^- \*\*Letters to Sorrel" notes/canon/characters/edwin.md
✅ 19 lines, 1331 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "rider verdict\|frost list\|refused to send\|Pellings" notes/canon/characters/…
✅ 10 lines, 750 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "one meeting\|met.*marsh\|marsh.*once\|father's burying" notes/canon/character…
✅ 1 lines, 72 chars
🔧 Bash: sed -n '85,125p' notes/canon/characters/sorrel.md
✅ 41 lines, 2490 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "eight weeks\|redacted\|Saltmonth\|forty-five\|Cornmonth" notes/canon/world/…
✅ 30 lines, 2235 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "days in\|month.*days\|Weedmonth\|Haymonth\|Fallowmonth\|Saltmonth" notes/cano…
✅ 20 lines, 1459 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "calendar\|month names\|days each\|30 days\|thirty days" notes/canon/world/*.m…
✅ 30 lines, 2997 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -rn "406\|thirteen down\|thirteen up\|redacted's eight acres" notes/canon/ | head…
✅ 8 lines, 824 chars
🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose
✅ 1 lines, 31 chars
🔧 Bash: redacted sentence: unpublished prose
✅ 40 lines, 3700 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "gatekeeper\|redacted\|redacted's rider\|window\|reads standing\|Lord Mars…
✅ 8 lines, 580 chars
🔧 Bash: sed -n '325,350p' notes/canon/characters/minor.md
✅ 26 lines, 1662 chars
🔧 Bash: sed -n '55,150p' notes/canon/system.md
✅ 95 lines, 5716 chars
🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "\"miss\|Miss Millbrook\|address her\|calls her\|called her" notes/canon/chara…
✅ 1 lines, 31 chars
No canon precedent found for "Miss Millbrook" as address — new, not contradictory.
I now have everything needed for the report.
redacted sentence redacted and the cart should have peeled off at the fen edge (end of Day 50/into Day 51's road), well before redacted (Day 52). Minimal fix: drop "and redacted" from the gatekeeper's inventory list (and drop "and the cart" too, or replace with whatever pack-carrying arrangement replaced redacted's cart after the fen edge).
Sorrel's letter, "rider verdict": matches canon, no fix needed. Scene 92 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence Confirmed correct.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose No fix needed.
"Forty-five days" arithmetic checks out. Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth (timeline.md), so 20 Cornmonth = Day 6; Day 51 = 5 Fallowmonth (timeline.md, stated directly). 51 − 6 = 45. Correct.
Left-handedness / "right-handed" writing and the "wrong hand" framing: consistent. Edwin.md establishes his writing hand is the left (splinted); scene 92 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose Peri's "An hour and forty minutes" line in dialogue matches the timeline entry verbatim. No fix needed.
The three words: compliant with the sealed/withheld rule. Scene 92 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose No fix needed.
Edwin's writing-skill mechanism: does not over-explain and does not contradict system.md. Scene 92 unpublished says only "something quiet under the writing," never naming [Letters]. redacted sentence in the same three words" — scene 92 unpublished's account (three wrongly-spelled words, caught only because he read the page back, "there had been something quiet under the writing all that time") is consistent with this without naming it. No fix needed.
Geography — redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished's climb), "ruled" drained country with banked main drains, lesser cuts every 400 yards, windpumps in threes (geography.md verbatim, matches scene 93 unpublished's description), "Twenty tenants" (redacted's line matches geography.md), "redacted... redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted. redacted sentence: unpublished prose No fixes needed.
"Expected on the fourth" and the gatekeeper's exchange: matches canon. Scene 85 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose The gatekeeper's line and Edwin's reply track this precisely. No fix needed.
redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted "foreman of a gang of forty"). No fixes needed. redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, not 93 — the meeting fact itself is consistent with minor.md's "twenty-two years back" funeral.)
redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted) — this thread is unconnected to any sealed mystery I can identify from the guard list (silent soil, deeps, destiny); nothing here front-loads cause or explanation for a load-bearing mystery. No flag.
One item requiring author decision: finding 1 (redacted at redacted) is a real continuity break against an explicitly fixed roster rule and should be fixed before these scenes are accepted.