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2026-09-02

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You are a canon-consistency lens for a novel draft in redacted. Check four newly drafted scenes for FACTS ONLY (counts, dates, names, who knows what, arithmetic, mechanics of the magic/System, geography, timeline, who was in the room). Report findings; do not edit any file.

Scenes: draft/book-01/scenes/43-two-lines-one-field.md unpublished (Days 14–15 = 28–29 Cornmonth), 44-where-they-stopped-writing.md unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (Day 15, ten to six), 46-a-list-of-houses.md unpublished (Day 15 evening). Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth. Read scenes 23–42 in draft/book-01/scenes/ for continuity (at least 31, 34, 36, 37, 40, 41, 42 in full).

redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted.md (Established: gear, escort work, four times down the Deep, eleven walks / nine hers per BACKFILL-ACT2, 'How they talk'), notes/canon/characters/minor.md (redacted, redacted, redacted, redacted, redacted 71, the steadings), notes/canon/characters/mattie-ordish.md, notes/sealed/redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished honours the must-nots there: not explained, admired or remarked on by Edwin).

STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or their git history; do not search for them. Canon files may quote old chapter lines — those are facts, not lines to suggest.

Verify in particular: (1) scene 43 unpublished's geometry and figures (9 ch 50 unpublished on Day 10 → 9 ch 73 unpublished on Day 15 = 23 links ≈ 5 yd in 5 days; 6 ch 20 → 6 ch 18; the two centres ~100 yd back SSW and 40 yd east; three possibles, the third struck) against canon; the boundary stone at the SE corner of the south redacted (new fact?); (2) scene 44 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose the sealed Deep clue says the slate is at the chain; flag if 44 contradicts that or make a recommendation); (3) scene 45 unpublished's roster arithmetic and redacted's and redacted's figures; redacted's age/appearance; that she reads Peri's sword without reacting; redacted's existence and role; whether redacted's 'third date I've written for that hill since Haymonth' is consistent (canon: due 10 Haymonth; the postponement notice; the 2 Fallowmonth ruling — how many dates is that?); (4) scene 46 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's age 71, the eleven walks / nine hers / redacted and redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose

Output: numbered findings, each with the quoted line, the canon file/line that contradicts it, and a concrete replacement. Then 'New facts' (one line each). No praise, no list of what passed.

46 tool calls

🔧 Bash: for f in draft/book-01/scenes/43-two-lines-one-field.md unpublished draft/book-01/scene…

✅ 204 lines, 27903 chars

🔧 Bash: cat -n redacted/notes/canon/world/silent-soil.md

✅ 38 lines, 2238 chars

🔧 Bash: cat -n redacted/notes/canon/world/timeline.md

✅ 37 lines, 2180 chars

🔧 Bash: cat -n redacted/notes/canon/world/institutions.md

✅ 38 lines, 2179 chars

🔧 Bash: cat -n redacted/notes/canon/world/dungeons.md

✅ 37 lines, 2200 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "chain|stump|west line|centre|center|boundary stone|link" redacted/notes/…

✅ 31 lines, 2239 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "day 1[0-9]|day 9|day 8|Cornmonth|interval" redacted/notes/canon/world/ti…

✅ 69 lines, 5020 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "roster|nineteen|six hands|day rate|1s|8d|shilling|Marsh|redacted|redacted…

✅ 59 lines, 4664 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "due|10 Haymonth|Fallowmonth|eleven weeks|forty-nine|thirty-three|held|leak…

✅ 66 lines, 4719 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '140,260p' redacted/notes/canon/world/silent-soil.md

✅ 121 lines, 7270 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '95,135p' redacted/notes/canon/world/dungeons.md

✅ 2 lines, 144 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "slate" redacted/notes/canon/world/dungeons.md redacted/notes/canon/world/…

✅ 4 lines, 546 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '35,55p;715,735p' redacted/notes/canon/world/dungeons.md

🔧 Bash: grep -n -A5 "Clues to plant" redacted/notes/sealed/redacted-grandmother-people.md | h…

✅ 41 lines, 2287 chars

✅ 6 lines, 237 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "steading|sluice|withy|redacted|hobbs|redacted|sennet|puckett|coule|mar…

✅ 93 lines, 6575 chars

🔧 Bash: cat -n redacted/notes/canon/characters/redacted.md

✅ 38 lines, 2198 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "redacted|redacted|redacted|redacted|redacted" redacted/notes/c…

✅ 41 lines, 3077 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '600,660p' redacted/notes/canon/world/dungeons.md

✅ 61 lines, 3289 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "stone|redacted|gatepost|south-east|south redacted" redacted/notes/ca…

✅ 19 lines, 2776 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i -E "backfill-act2|west line 6|west-east" redacted/draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT…

✅ 2 lines, 351 chars

🔧 Bash: sed -n '213,236p' redacted/notes/canon/world/timeline.md

✅ 24 lines, 1499 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -B2 -A2 "twenty-eighth of Cornmonth" redacted/notes/canon/world/timeline.md

✅ 5 lines, 320 chars

🔧 Bash: grep -n -i "nought\|zero" redacted/notes/canon/world/silent-soil.md | head -10 grep -rn…

✅ 24 lines, 7490 chars

Findings

  1. Scene 44 unpublished — slate location contradicts the sealed Deep clue.
    redacted sentence: unpublished prose It's the air. At the mouth. Whoever's out at the chain chalks it."

redacted sentence: unpublished prose Scene 44 unpublished puts a slate recording the same "In"/air readings on the board's post in Fenholt street. As written this reads as the slate, not a copy, and collides with the sealed instruction that this record lives at the chain. Recommend either cutting the physical slate from scene 44 unpublished (redacted can simply state the fact — "it's chalked at the chain and told, it doesn't come here") or, if a town record must exist, explicitly naming it as a second, transcribed tally kept separately from the mouth's own slate.

  1. Scene 45 unpublished — withy bed's distance from the church.
    redacted sentence: unpublished prose

redacted sentence: unpublished prose "Under a mile" contradicts the established mile-and-a-quarter. redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted's "under a mile from the church" (line 31 of scene 45 unpublished, "which was under a mile from the church") be cut/rephrased to match 1¼ mile.

  1. Scene 45 unpublished — redacted's "third date... since Haymonth" is unsupported by what's on the board.

"That's the third date I've written for that hill since Haymonth. I wrote the first one too."

Scene 44 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose That's two specific dates (10 Haymonth, 2 Fallowmonth), not three, with nothing dated in between for redacted to have written. Either give the board a second superseded specific date (so three genuinely exist) or change redacted's line to "the second date."

  1. Scene 45 unpublished — Edwin appears to remark on the read-back habit, in tension with the sealed clue's must-not.
    redacted sentence: unpublished prose he put it in the grey book that night... as a thing seen and not understood, which was a column that was getting longer."

The sealed file notes/sealed/redacted-grandmother-people.md (Clues to plant, item 1) requires this beat not be explained, admired, or remarked on by Edwin. He doesn't speak of it, but the narration has him privately flag it as notable and log it — functionally a remark. Flag for the author to check against the sealed wording; I have not quoted or characterized the sealed content itself, only the shape of the tension.

  1. Scene 44 unpublished — minor forward-continuity risk (low confidence, outside required reading).
    notes/canon/world/timeline.md (Day 14/15 note) quotes a later scene (ch. 014, Day 26) where redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose Scene 44 unpublished's slate shows only three entries (7th, 14th, 28th). This may not resolve cleanly against that later line; flagging for awareness only, since ch. 014 wasn't in the required reading and may itself get revised.

New facts

All other checked figures verified against canon and matched exactly: the stump-line chain series (9 ch 50 unpublished Day 10 → 9 ch 73 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted and redacted = 10 rosterable − 3 to Marsh's − 1 lame leg = 6), day rates (1s 8d vs 3s and dinner), redacted's four descents before Weedmonth, the eleven walks/nine hers split, redacted's age (71), redacted's age (68), redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose