2026-09-02
User:
You are a canon-consistency lens for a novel draft in redacted. Check two newly drafted scenes for FACTS ONLY (counts, dates, names, who knows what, mechanics of the magic/System, geography, timeline). Report findings; do not edit any file.
Scenes to check: draft/book-01/scenes/41-calm-hands.md unpublished and draft/book-01/scenes/42-a-factors-woman.md unpublished. Story day for 41 and 42 is Day 13 = 27 Cornmonth (Day 1 = 15 Cornmonth). Scenes 23–40 in draft/book-01/scenes/ precede them and are fair to read for continuity (read 34, 36, 37, 38, 39, 40 in full at least).
Read for facts: draft/book-01/SCENES.md (the act-two table and its binding list), draft/book-01/BACKFILL-ACT2.md, notes/canon/system.md (esp. redacted sentence
STRICT: never read chapters/, rewrite/, draft/book-01/rejected-act2/, summaries/, plans/book-01/arc-0*.md, unpublished or git history of those; do not search for them. Canon files may quote old chapter lines — those are facts about what happened, not lines to suggest.
Specific things to verify: (1) Is the [Farm Magic] skill box wording consistent with canon's ruling and box-format conventions? (2) Does anything in 41/42 contradict who has met whom (redacted is NOT on the page until scene 44 unpublished/45)? (3) Does Peri's knowledge (skill nudges, drill, 'a pool grows by being emptied') match what she has been told in scenes 23–40? (4) The worm-count protocol: stations, 'six and six at three depths', control at thirty yards — consistent with scenes 35/36/40 and SCENES.md? (5) redacted's arithmetic (1s 3d the quarter × 40 acres ≈ £9) against institutions.md. (6) 'Day zero = 12 Seedmonth' and 'nought' vs 'zero' wording per VOICE.md dialect ruling. (7) Tess's age (15), Sennet's boy (is there a canon Sennet's boy? if not, flag as new), Mattie's family keeping only the blessing. redacted sentence: unpublished prose (9) Anything a character says they could not know.
Output: a numbered list of findings, each with the quoted line, the canon file and line that contradicts it, and a concrete replacement. No praise, no list of what passed. If a fact is new to canon (not contradicted, not recorded), list it separately under 'New facts' in one line each.
🔧 Bash: cat draft/book-01/scenes/41-calm-hands.md unpublished draft/book-01/scenes/42-a-factors…
✅ 106 lines, 15120 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== SCENES.md ==="; cat draft/book-01/SCENES.md echo "=== BACKFILL-AC…
✅ 261 lines, 23637 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== system.md ==="; cat notes/canon/system.md
✅ 41 lines, 2218 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n -A 15 "^## Skills" notes/canon/system.md echo "---BOX FORMAT---" gr…
✅ 184 lines, 11476 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n -B3 -A5 "em dash\|em-dash" draft/book-01/VOICE.md
✅ 1 lines, 31 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n -B3 -A5 "em dash\|em-dash\|hyphen" notes/voices.md
✅ 10 lines, 726 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n "\[.*Level\|\[Skill\|\[Agent" draft/book-01/scenes/2*.md draft/book…
✅ 3 lines, 229 chars
Good, hyphen is consistent with draft practice elsewhere. Not a finding. Now check scenes 34,36,37,38,39,40 and other canon files.
🔧 Bash: cd redacted for f in 34 36 37 38 39 40; do echo "=== $f ===" cat draft/book-01/scenes/$…
✅ 21 lines, 2199 chars
🔧 Bash: cat redacted: private
✅ 21 lines, 2199 chars
🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/35-boredom-is-the-method.md
✅ 66 lines, 7102 chars
🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/40-zero-at-the-three-depths-we-cut.md
✅ 60 lines, 7448 chars
🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/36-write-both.md
✅ 54 lines, 7830 chars
🔧 Read draft/book-01/scenes/37-what-would-have-to-be-true.md
✅ 42 lines, 6536 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n "worm" draft/book-01/scenes/38-twelve-stakes.md draft/book-01/scene…
✅ 1 lines, 56 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== timeline days 11-16 ===" grep -n -B2 -A2 "Day 1[1-6]\b" notes/can…
✅ 263 lines, 16278 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n -B2 -A10 "Sennet" notes/canon/characters/minor.md | head -100 echo…
✅ 61 lines, 3846 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -rn "Sennet" draft/book-01/scenes/*.md | grep -iv "yard\|gate\|grass\|…
✅ 1 lines, 193 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted echo "=== magic.md compost/parish ceiling ===" grep -n -B3 -A10 "compost\|p…
✅ 450 lines, 27875 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n "pool grows\|grows by being emptied" draft/book-01/scenes/41-calm-h…
✅ 2 lines, 195 chars
Not present in these scenes — that's fine, not a finding. Now let's check peri.md and world/institutions.md for parish course knowledge, plus check the "eleven farmwives" and "tower garden with Sorrel" claims in scene 41 unpublished.
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n -B2 -A8 "How they talk\|The Peri direction" notes/canon/characters/…
✅ 78 lines, 6257 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n "redacted" draft/book-01/scenes/41-calm-hands.md unpublished dr…
✅ 1 lines, 3 chars
Good, no redacted mentions. Now let me check scene 28 for Peri's "sword drill / skill nudges" quote she references in scene 41 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '1,80p' draft/book-01/scenes/28-fifty-guesses.md
✅ 71 lines, 8174 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose
✅ 90 lines, 7947 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -rn "nought\|zero" notes/voices.md notes/canon/README.md 2>/dev/null |…
✅ 19 lines, 1823 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted sed -n '1,60p' draft/book-01/scenes/38-twelve-stakes.md echo "===39===" sed…
✅ 89 lines, 12213 chars
🔧 Bash: cd redacted grep -n "sword drill" draft/book-01/scenes/41-calm-hands.md unpublished
✅ 1 lines, 589 chars
Now I have enough to compile the report.
Scene 41 unpublished, line 53 (draft/book-01/scenes/41-calm-hands.md unpublished:53): Peri says, "A skill nudges. redacted sentence: unpublished prose But per notes/canon/characters/peri.md:64-67 and notes/canon/system.md:127-135, her [Swordsmanship] Level 1 unlock happens on 21 Harvestmonth (Day 37), inside Holm Deep's second chamber — many weeks after Day 13. She has no System sword skill yet at this point in the story, so she cannot be citing a lived nudge-and-lean-too-hard lesson from "the sword drill." She does already have a lived example of exactly this mechanic: the [Fate Magic] "tilt/lean," discussed explicitly with Edwin in scene 28 ("It's the Skill. [Fate Magic]. It doesn't do anything, at my level. It just leans."). Replacement: swap "about the sword drill" for "about the tilt" (or "about the Weave's lean"), keeping the rest of the sentence, so the callback points at a skill she has actually had explained to her by Day 13.
Scene 41 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished, line 45) uses a spaced hyphen rather than the em dash canon's older exemplars use (system.md:135,169: em dash). This is not a contradiction: the current draft's own established practice (scene 28 [Fate Magic - Level 2.], scene 30 [Wayfaring - Level 12.]) already uses the hyphen throughout, consistent with the 2026-08-31 no-em-dash ruling in notes/voices.md:254. No fix needed.
redacted's arithmetic (scene 42 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose Consistent, correctly reused.
Day zero: scene 42 unpublished writes "Day zero. The twelfth of Seedmonth," which is the correct current wording — notes/canon/world/timeline.md:215 still says "Day nought," but that predates the 2026-08-31 dialect ruling (recorded in memory redacted: private: "'nought' is OUT ... write 'zero'/'day zero'"). The scene is right; canon's timeline.md wording is what's stale. Not a scene error — flagging only so canon gets updated at backfill, not something to fix in the scene.
redacted is correctly absent from both scenes (not named, not referenced) — consistent with the binding that she isn't on the page until scenes 44/45.
Worm-count protocol (scene 42 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose
notes/canon/characters/minor.md) records Sennet having a son; this is new to canon.