Facts-only consistency check on three freshly drafted scenes in [redacted]…

Facts-only consistency check: scenes 83–85

Findings

1. Major — the Marsh reply's date and promised day both contradict timeline.md.
Scene 85 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose 020)."* Two separate facts conflict: (a) the reply goes out a day later than the draft has it, and (b) the promised date is the fourth, not the eighth — corroborated by timeline.md's later entry, "Day 52 (6 Fallowmonth): ... redacted; 'expected on the fourth' (chs. 022, 023)." Minimal fix: move the reply's departure to Day 43 (27th), and change "the eighth" to "the fourth" throughout Edwin's dictated letter.

2. Major — Sorrel's letter's route and delivery day conflict with established arrival.
Scene 84 unpublished has a letter "in Sorrel's hand" carried by the Fellowship's three and handed to Edwin on 25 Harvestmonth (Day 41). redacted sentence: unpublished prose No citation anywhere establishes the Fellowship as carrying Sorrel's mail. This is either a genuine invention needing confirmation or an error; if kept, the scene should not have Edwin open it (it isn't), and the "read in the yard" scene (Day 46) should acknowledge the letter has already been sitting five days — currently unaddressed. Minimal fix: either cut this letter from scene 84 unpublished and let it arrive by the established route on/near Day 46, or add a line establishing why it rode with the Fellowship's three.

3. Moderate — scene 83 unpublished's Fellowship-arrival arrangements conflict with scene 84 unpublished and canon.
   Scene 83 unpublished (Day 40, 24 Harvestmonth evening) has redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted before dark"* — grouped in the same sentence as "tonight" (referring to 24 Harvestmonth). But minor.md and timeline.md (Day 41) both fix the Fellowship's three arriving 25 Harvestmonth at six — which scene 84 unpublished redacted sentence: unpublished prose Scene 83 unpublished thus anticipates their arrival a full day early. Minimal fix: reword scene 83 unpublished's arrangements to describe tomorrow's (25th's) six o'clock, distinct from "tonight's" watch order.

4. Moderate — "banks of redacted... walked from tonight" duplicates a decision already made and dated in scene 80 unpublished.
   Scene 80 unpublished (Day 39, 23 Harvestmonth) has redacted institute the new watch immediately: *"the watch changes... The banks of redacted get walked... redacted sentence: unpublished prose unpublished (Day 40) has her announce it again as starting "from tonight" — implying an origin one night later than canon has it. This is likely just redacted repeating standing instructions rather than announcing a new policy, but as written it reads as the watch's inception, not its continuation. Minimal fix: change "being walked from tonight" to something like "still being walked" or reference it as ongoing since the 23rd.

5. Moderate — the agreement's "third clause" is given content that conflicts with its established definition.
redacted sentence: unpublished prose 014)."* Scene 84 unpublished has redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose

6. Minor — clue-2 shape is present but inverted, and redacted's answer exceeds a bare refusal.
   The required sealed shape (reported at shape level only) calls for redacted to deliver the flagged line and decline further, with Peri writing it down and asking. In scene 83 unpublished it is Peri, not redacted, who says "Somebody should have said their names" as the opening line; redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted additionally volunteers personal content beyond a bare decline — she knew two of the four, went down with two of them, and states they should have been struck four years ago. This doesn't leak the sealed material's actual content (no religion, no Lodes, no reeve, etc. — all of that is scrupulously absent), and the "four years ago" figure is consistent with the pre-arc "four dead or gone and unstruck" roster fact in institutions.md. But it is more disclosure than the sealed shape's "and that is the whole answer" instruction anticipates for this beat, and the line inversion (Peri speaking redacted's designated line) is worth a deliberate check rather than an accident. Minimal fix: confirm intentionally, or swap the opening line to redacted and let Peri's version be the notebook entry only.

7. Minor — "eats standing" applied outside its established scope.
redacted.md establishes "Eats standing, every morning (ch. 019)." Scene 83 unpublished shows her eating standing after supper, an evening context. Plausible as an extended habit rather than a morning-only tic, but it's an extrapolation beyond the citation. No fix required unless DRMacIver wants the habit kept strictly to mornings.

Checked and consistent (no issues)

• redacted redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted.md's Established section verbatim in substance.
• Peri "entered as a party... in her own name," costing the Charter nothing — matches canon exactly.
• redacted giving the imperative "Enter it" before redacted, and redacted never issuing an imperative — matches the redacted/redacted voice ruling in minor.md.
• The four struck names' date (22 Harvestmonth) and the 19→15 roster count match timeline.md Day 38 and institutions.md's pre-arc "four dead or gone and unstruck."
• "Thirty-six days" from Edwin's 20 Cornmonth letter to 26 Harvestmonth checks out exactly by day-of-year arithmetic (doy 230 → doy 266).
• "The works... redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted sentence: unpublished prose redacted stand-down (11 Harvestmonth) and the established Marsh gang figures.
  redacted sentence: unpublished prose
• redacted's day rate (1s 8d) and the Charter/redacted/Fellowship three-way split match established figures.

New facts (not contradictions, worth noting for backfill)

redacted sentence: unpublished prose

• redacted's day rate given as two shillings (redacted) — not found explicitly stated elsewhere in institutions.md's ledger, which lists only the Charter's (1s 8d) and Marsh's (3s) rates.
• redacted's written terms dated "the twenty-third... the day they had walked redacted" (ties her secondment paper's drafting to the events of scene 80 unpublished).
• redacted's personal backstory beat — she went down with two of the four struck, four years ago — is new material (see finding 6).